Not really a poem I don't think... ...more like thoughts.
Life's Script
Some say You write your own script In this life
If that were so I would write mine And you would be with me
If that were so Scripts would conflict Too many directors Too many actors Too many angles in the plot The production would be a mess The audience (you and me) At best confused At worst crazy
Hi Regis, Are we the audience of our own script? It feels like it, to me. When all the dreaming, wishing, hoping and praying is over, we end up on the stage anyway, watching others watching us. Very thought-provoking and deep. Only you.... thank you for sharing...
A witty play on the metaphor. So much truth in what you say. The ending has a sad feel, which is something I see often in your deep writes; a longing. Thank you for sharing this work:)
Sheila
Beautiful graphic photo Regis!
I have missed your works most of all!
Super flow of words,
you have what it takes!
Becca Lang (changed my last name to my Mom's)
I love this...it captures my own thoughts and God, how I wish we could write our script sometimes; yet all we can do is hope and pray
Reviewed by M. B. (Reader)
Reviewed on March 10, 2005
Regis, this is so true though:
If that were so
Scripts would conflict
Too many directors
Too many actors
Too many angles in the plot
The production would be a mess
The audience (you and me)
At best confused
At worst crazy
You seem to always manage to realistically capture the best and the worst of life so gracefully within your words. That's raw talent plated with 24k gold skill.
Very nice and well written Regis. You do have the flair for the dramatic, and that is what capitvates us an audience. May the Lord be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love, peace, & (((HUGS))) ... Barbie
"If I have to...Then I may as well be."
Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz (Reader)
Reviewed on March 2, 2005
Ahhh...Regis...what a lovely, lovely piece!
The graphic complements it perfectly, too.
Dear Regis...I can relate this my friend...I cried after reading this write of yours....the ending made me shed tears...this is very deep and powerful my friend....well, you are the master of the verse my friend....your words touched the heart of your reader and thats the reason why I rate you very high as a poet....You are the role model my friend....cheers...love n luck...let me end by quoting your own write..."No wonder people
Dream
Hope
Wish
Pray
Regis,
I've missed some excellent work by not visiting your A/D site and reading more often. This is just another exquisite example of the thought provoking master pieces you write. Excellent my friend.
It's true. Neither our (socially) productive nor our imaginative powers are absolute. Yet, we are not meant to resignate. You caught this reality very well in your poem. It carries a nice and thoughtful melancholy.
Stream-of-consciousness poems are my favorite as they reveal what is really in the persons mind, in the exact way it flows out.
I agree with you, it is our desire to mold the world to fit our internal scripts that definitely creates confusion. Actually I think to be more precise: it creates unmet expectations. And boy oh boy, watch out for those unmet expectations when they come barreling at you at nearly the speed of light. But when it works, it is the best thing in the whole world. It is peace.
I liked the style you used for this one; it was almost like reading one of those stream-of-conscious papers. I do agree that a scripted life would seem to easier at the moment, but scripts only work in movies and soap operas- well movies anyway LOL. Just remember that all things happen for a reason and everything happens as it should :) *HUGS* and take care. Danielle
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on February 27, 2005
If that were so
I would write mine
And you would be with me
..the above says it all..indeed you have a way with words Regis..I gather you have a way with love as well..
saved this one..:)
Oh I like this theme lol
I relate and have written on it myself.
I guess we are souls given to speculation.......
its always good I believe to have aspirations beyond acceptance........
we hold the world in our yearnings.........
and find magic in our wishes!
oh now I am meloncholy! lol
pax A
Reviewed by June Thompson (Reader)
Reviewed on February 26, 2005
much enjoyed. I liked the photo very much as well. life is a movie, a game, so many things it has been called but most importantly they say it is what you make of it.
I love this write, Regis. I've often thought the same thing about folks who say we can just name it and claim it. If that were so easy, then I'd have a lot better lovelife and more toys. LOL
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on February 26, 2005
May I suggest a gentle irony, Regis? In writing this, and it's wonderful, indeed, you have scripted part of your life... the lovely thing is, you allowed us to see it.
I like the way you tied it together at the end. It's a bit of a quiet rant, yet that is all part of it, isn't it? Poetic is what I'd call it. (smile) katy xox.
Regis, It may not be poetry in the form of the educated. But it heart and soul poetry for all that's read it.
The scripts in our lives are not always ours to write..but we can keep freelancing until we get it right.
Beautiful work and magical thoughts Regis.
Caught up into the disordered world that is at once chaotic, unfathomable, outside of our control - and yet, at the same time, has a perfect rhythm, pattern, order and natural "rightness" about it, even within the seeming randomness... if you are in the midst of it with the other person/soul that lends stability and reason to your "reason to be". That personal counterbalance survives - even thrives, I think, in the midst of all things and is more sharply noticed when life is "a mess". Sounds like the poetry that is life. Your words are perfect sanity and perfect poetry to me, Regis, as always. TY and bless you (both!!) Kate xx
As always you get wonderful feedback from your fellow poets here at the den and deservedly. I did notice that some people referred to this poem as 'prose' while others call it poetry. I know that the purist's view would be that anything that doesn't conform to a strict metrical structure or that doesn't rhyme is not poetry but I don't hold to this view. I think that poetry encompasses many styles and forms, including free verse which I believe this is. You are very gifted Regis and your poetry always inspires me.
You pose an interesting question. Do we write our own scripts? I think that this might hold true to a point but there are circumstances that are simply out of our control. I found it interesting that you use this analogy and then seem to refute it. Where old Bill Shakespeare compared us to actors in a play, you see 'us' as the audience. Is this because you feel powerless at this time? I pray your script plays out and that your 'mirajolie' will be with you as you desire.
"If we could write our own scripts..." I'm trying to imagine the incredible kaos that would ensue in this scenario and all I see are millions of puppets whose lines are hopelessly tangled, and puppeteers fighting for space on the stage! May you be united with the object of your dreams soon, Regis...
Excellent! Very Methodical and Great points here and you always keep that Romance, Love and Peace about you! Beautiful You!! Beautiful Poem!! Picture I love it! This poem will help me dream too, of you and her!!!
Thanks my friend.
XXXXX OOOO
Tracey
If this is not poetry, then it must be poetic thoughts at least. Never let go of your dreams, Regis. Nothing is impossible if you believe it will happen and desire it to happen.
Take care,
Sherry
If I were to write my own script!
Well, I'll let God write it for me now bcus am not inspired to write :(
Beautiful poem, Regis, thanks for sharing
Love and peace
Ah, I was hoping to find a Regis offering.
Always a gem to study, and put in different lights to see all it can do.
Wonderful.
I'll let God write this script any day. He is getting it right now. LOL.
John
It sounds a lot like poetry to me Regis and definately gives the reader pause to thought as well as a glimpse of the love you have for your "someone". I like this one a lot.
Felix
Reviewed by Faye Enno (Reader)
Reviewed on February 25, 2005
Beautiful write. :)
Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader)
Reviewed on February 25, 2005
I like this is a really good thing to write our own script but then maybe we would miss some key characters if we did. So we must be content with a biography.
Interesting thoughts and profound actually. Think about it though...most of us do write our own scripts, that is why the world is a mess and we keep dreaming, hoping, wishing, and praying...
because we don't let God take control and guide us to a more beautiful path than we can dream of for ourselves.
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Only you mon ami can turn words into sheer gold. Tout simplement manifique!!!!!!
Nicole
In Spirit,
Bear
A witty play on the metaphor. So much truth in what you say. The ending has a sad feel, which is something I see often in your deep writes; a longing. Thank you for sharing this work:)
Sheila
I have missed your works most of all!
Super flow of words,
you have what it takes!
Becca Lang (changed my last name to my Mom's)
Pat
Thought provoking...so beautifully penned--excellent!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :(
If that were so
Scripts would conflict
Too many directors
Too many actors
Too many angles in the plot
The production would be a mess
The audience (you and me)
At best confused
At worst crazy
You seem to always manage to realistically capture the best and the worst of life so gracefully within your words. That's raw talent plated with 24k gold skill.
I look forward to reading your poetry.
(((Hugs)))
Your thoughts touch us all Regis.
T C - D a n a
"If I have to...Then I may as well be."
The graphic complements it perfectly, too.
May the unworthy prayers die before being born.
Hank
Dream
Hope
Wish
Pray
That’s what I am doing
So you can be with me'"
EXCELLENT!!!!!
Exquisite write my friend ... definitively refined - outstanding!!
Best regards,
Robert
I've missed some excellent work by not visiting your A/D site and reading more often. This is just another exquisite example of the thought provoking master pieces you write. Excellent my friend.
Sherry
as all yours truly are
William .....Peace
:)Sandy
Blessings,
Joseph
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :D
You write with beauty and style!
Your friend, ~Linda
I agree with you, it is our desire to mold the world to fit our internal scripts that definitely creates confusion. Actually I think to be more precise: it creates unmet expectations. And boy oh boy, watch out for those unmet expectations when they come barreling at you at nearly the speed of light. But when it works, it is the best thing in the whole world. It is peace.
~ Sara
Safi
I would write mine
And you would be with me
..the above says it all..indeed you have a way with words Regis..I gather you have a way with love as well..
saved this one..:)
Vesna:)
Bravo!
Reindeer
Happy writing Regis
Joy and sunshine
and deeply resonant
a poem it is
and a good one!
john +
I relate and have written on it myself.
I guess we are souls given to speculation.......
its always good I believe to have aspirations beyond acceptance........
we hold the world in our yearnings.........
and find magic in our wishes!
oh now I am meloncholy! lol
pax A
Connie
Love from India - Joel -
I like the way you tied it together at the end. It's a bit of a quiet rant, yet that is all part of it, isn't it? Poetic is what I'd call it. (smile) katy xox.
The scripts in our lives are not always ours to write..but we can keep freelancing until we get it right.
Beautiful work and magical thoughts Regis.
Lisa
As always you get wonderful feedback from your fellow poets here at the den and deservedly. I did notice that some people referred to this poem as 'prose' while others call it poetry. I know that the purist's view would be that anything that doesn't conform to a strict metrical structure or that doesn't rhyme is not poetry but I don't hold to this view. I think that poetry encompasses many styles and forms, including free verse which I believe this is. You are very gifted Regis and your poetry always inspires me.
You pose an interesting question. Do we write our own scripts? I think that this might hold true to a point but there are circumstances that are simply out of our control. I found it interesting that you use this analogy and then seem to refute it. Where old Bill Shakespeare compared us to actors in a play, you see 'us' as the audience. Is this because you feel powerless at this time? I pray your script plays out and that your 'mirajolie' will be with you as you desire.
Love Chanti
Sighhhhhhhh....yes sighhhhhhhhhhh!!
Love Tinka..............sweets....lol!!
Thanks my friend.
XXXXX OOOO
Tracey
Take care,
Sherry
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Hope your wishes materialize!;-)
love,
eileen
Well, I'll let God write it for me now bcus am not inspired to write :(
Beautiful poem, Regis, thanks for sharing
Love and peace
Always a gem to study, and put in different lights to see all it can do.
Wonderful.
I'll let God write this script any day. He is getting it right now. LOL.
John
Felix
because we don't let God take control and guide us to a more beautiful path than we can dream of for ourselves.
I really like this piece Reg...
ann
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