“Let us be friends!” A noble declaration A wonderful suggestion An open invitation But when she added “Just” between “us” and “be” I distinctly heard several doors Slam shut The sun sank into the sea It took the moon and the stars with it Leaving a lightless void Reverberating With the implied echoes Of goodbye...
Copyright 2004 by Regis J. Auffray All rights reserved.
Excellent and powerfully written Regis!
I felt every word...What a beautiful
gift God has blessed you with! Thank you
for sharing and for caring! Be encouraged
and may the Lord strengthen you each day!
Regis,
I love this one! You have put a new spin on the 'kiss of death' line. Excellent imagery to demonstrate that sinking feeling. Love and Hugs.
Sheila
Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
Reviewed on March 24, 2005
Powerful.
Really hit that awful gut feeling that is felt.
Excellent. I heard those doors slamming as you spoke there.
Thank You
Tracey
So touching and painful.A lot of doors are slammed against us in this single life,ha?But I hope,there would be someone who never leave us...
with love
David
~Excellent write, my dear friend.
Your writing is awesome!
Yf, *Linda*
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on January 5, 2004
Hi Regis, tis a sad story that most of us have experienced. But I would much rather comment on your writing..My goodness man...You are getting GOOD...this touched and gripped at my heart in just a few words. I mean..I had tears...Keep writing those deep feelings from the soul. They are the ones that produce the best writing..Clap Clap for this one....floria
Deborah is right. The problem is, most people pretend we can't read between the lines. And it just turns me inside out. They want you to get the point, then turn around and tell you you're wrong. Go figure! Good work, Regis.
oh this depicts heartache so eloquently.
I especially liked "The sun sank into the sea
It took the moon and the stars with it" fantastic line
so sorry... :(
don't you hate it when the sun goes down and take the moon and the stars with it! ;) -a
Reviewed by S H (Reader)
Reviewed on January 4, 2004
Hm, well I think it would be good to be friends. We should have started out that way and I would like us to be Regis. It's not so negative, but since I see you have no interest. I won't try.Your choice-not mine. Nice poem by the way. Love, Stephanie
so sad, regis; but very well done! excellent! (see? i got your message; sorry if i haven't been by! forgive me????)
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx, karen lynn. :( >tears <
Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
Reviewed on January 4, 2004
Ohhhhh Regis this is so sad and touching, but if it stems from a real experience be happy she spoke the direct truth!
Excellant emotive writing!
Happy New Year
((((Hugs))))
~Nikki~
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I felt every word...What a beautiful
gift God has blessed you with! Thank you
for sharing and for caring! Be encouraged
and may the Lord strengthen you each day!
Much Love,
Margaret
Very emotional poem just the way I like them, that is why you are one of my favorite author on AD. Manifique mon cher ami.
Nicole
In just a word - brilliant!!
Best regards,
Lance
I love this one! You have put a new spin on the 'kiss of death' line. Excellent imagery to demonstrate that sinking feeling. Love and Hugs.
Sheila
Really hit that awful gut feeling that is felt.
Excellent. I heard those doors slamming as you spoke there.
Thank You
Tracey
with love
David
Regis this is a marvellous piece of work. May the sun rise again from the bottom of the ocean with all the lumnous bodies it had sunk with.
i like how you don't mince words in this write, poetic economics at its best!
I love your style...
:)Sandy
Your writing is awesome!
Yf, *Linda*
the doors slam. ;)
Carmen
May 2004 hold renewals for you, Regis.
Gina
you have succinctly hit the core, here.
I especially liked "The sun sank into the sea
It took the moon and the stars with it" fantastic line
so sorry... :(
To the Unwise Damnation!
In Looking For Girl Of Your Dream's,i.e. You Will Never Find Her Simply Because She Lives In Your Dream's!PS: Your Dreams Are REAL!
Your Rewards Are Not Of In This Physical World!
TRASK
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx, karen lynn. :( >tears <
Excellant emotive writing!
Happy New Year
((((Hugs))))
~Nikki~
I wish you peace within your heart,
Tami
a beautiful, sad write--BRAVA, dear friend
thank you for your reviews and kindnesses extended toward me
(((HUGS))) and love,
karla. :(
A sharp pen you have.
Awesome work.
OUCH!
John
Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o)
Right between the eyes....Wham!!
Hope You Okay Regis....hope we can stay friends......right?
Love Tinka