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Circumcision
by Patrick A Granfors → (All Poetry by Patrick A Granfors)
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He circumcised my eyes

My point of view

Desecrated

He circumcised my voice

My articulation

Disengaged

He circumcised my hearing

My symphony

Denied

He circumcised my heart

My emotions

Deflowered

He circumcised my love

My essence

Devoid

 

 

 

Copyright 2010 Patrick Granfors

 


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 Reviews of "Circumcision"
Reviewed by Regis Auffray
Reviewed on September 21, 2010
Unique, clever and meaningful. Well done, Patrick. Love and peace,

Regis

Reviewed by Annabel Sheila
Reviewed on September 20, 2010
Wasnt' sure what I was going to find when I opened this one, Patrick. Nicely done...

Anna

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
Muleskinner foreskin! Paul Simon's Slip Sliding Away...the validity in this poem is for cleanliness and religious purposes? Cut!

Love,
Sage

Reviewed by Artūrs Lūsis (Reader)
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
suddenly word circumcision pops up in my email, turns out - a new poem. well, i've always been careful with these 'heavy' narrow meaning words, but this piece is ravishing for its wonderfully handy way of tricking the word into building feelings of suspense and completion simultaniously, still keeping its heavy weight.

why do i stress my opinion on the words employability? it is a motionless word, too fragrant and expressive as it is, with its connotations & accompanying sensations, symbolism of diverse kind, taboos, etc. overused, even; but this poem, with masterful word-puzzling makes a sensational journey, that of a being - could be man or woman, the narrator/protagonist; i'm telling by the fact that circumcision is used on both sexes.

rest of the words used here - also imaginative for their original qualities, keeping in balance with connotations of 'circumcised/cision. so, without excessive manipulation, but tasteful approach to words' magical powers each one of them hold, you have created a piece of poetry that possess the indistructable force of all these words put together, making them tell a story; sing & whisper & cry, keeping absolutely silent in motion & still.

proves a monument can be of few words (unlike this review of admiring appraisal, after being slightly conflicted; only literary analysis could help)

Reviewed by Paul Berube
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
Well done, Patrick.

Reviewed by E T Waldron
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
a unique and exciting poem,Patrick!

Reviewed by pat medlin
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
jeez louise patrick...you caught me totaally off guard w/ this one... left my peabrain pondering...who beee-ith 'he'

i need to know so i can punish him severely...hmmmm


Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader)
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
Perfect poetry through and through. I love this! Very well done.

Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on September 19, 2010
Sure glad he didn't get me! Very thought-provoking poem, Patrick. Especially the word, desecrate.

Ron


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