Based on a true story told using a simple rhyme scheme.
(the picture I've used has no relation to the story and was one I picked purely because it seemed appropriate)
With a fervor born of passion and a desire to reach his fellow man the preacher took the stage and spoke with great élan He talked about his childhood on the wrong side of the track A ghetto wrought with poverty where he had to watch his back Born to a 'working' mother and the father who was her pimp Drugs caused a birth defect that left him with a limp
Through hardship he was hardened All emotion buried deep His face a mask of anger only softened in his sleep In teenage years his fury led to a life of crime He'd terrorize his neighbors if only for a dime A gangster and a thug feared by all who knew Nobody could stop him not least the men in blue.
But one day he robbed a store and a clerk pulled out a gun He took a bullet in the leg and yet still he tried to run He was arrested on the street and hoisted off to jail And in court it was decided that he should get no bail Labeled as habitual with a record that would show that the only place for this young man was the place that he'd soon go.
In jail he was attacked and left bleeding and near death was taken to the infirmary and there breathed his dying breath
The preacher paused and waited until a hush fell on the crowd Then he looked to heaven and began to pray out loud "Father open up their hearts Let them hear what I will say and help them to believe. With all my heart I pray." The audience grew restless Not sure how to respond to the man who stood before them Afraid they would be conned. Yet in his eyes they saw something that gave them hope their own lives out of kilter were headed down the slope
Finally he began to tell them what he'd seen A passage that had led to hell the place that he had been His life replayed before him he feared the judgment that would come He bowed his head and waited for it all to come undone Instead he felt a presence of unconditional love It surrounded him with light and pulled him back above.
In the infirmary, the staff were shocked by what they saw The corpse that lay before them came to life once more Instead of bitter features his face took on a glow A man had died that day but another man would grow Soon he was released changed in all respects And made an oath to God that he'd pay back all his debts He knew he couldn't undo all the damage he had done but by touching other lives perhaps the battle could be won.
Those prisoners in the hall were silent for a while and then they burst into applause each face a shining smile His testimony shared and his past exposed that way The preacher knew his prayer was answered on that day.
How did I miss this one, dear Chanti?
Profound, enthralling, enigmatic...I am running out of adjectives,
though not out of praise for the brilliance of your work!
OMG... Chanti~! YOU had me flowingggg in tears. YOur expression of writing this Wonderful bittersweet poem, left me wondering... Did you write this, or see it... yOU sure did feel it! Did you see a movie that inspired your feelings so deeply???? Something did it, and did it good... cuz, Boy - You struck it home. Unconditional Love is All Anyone NEEDS and is lookin' for! I hope your Happy- Healthy and life is inspiring you greatly, you have a Beautiful way of expressing yourself, that I enjoy immensouly... As I read, it was as if something I have written, than it took on a story form, I am appalled that someone would go through so much pain, and that others are so quick to critize and then, you read of HOPE and you know in your heart of hearts, that is All that is Needed... Unconditional Love and Hope! I want to say/write more, but I will stop right there. Let's just say------> I was sure touched by your expressions/words and the pict.! Love and BRIGHT Light has fallen upon your heart and there it will stay, I will have you in my prayers! Love,Loveand Peace- HuGs!
I find it most difficult to write "proper" poetry in strict metre and form - and most ESPECIALLY with rhyme as well. But you have incorporated all three of these most excellent and difficult disciplines into one heartfelt and truly moving poem, Chanti, without losing any sort of edge or reality. In fact, more than that, you have made the life of this narrative live and breathe in such a way that it FORCES all the constraints upon it to jump to its tune. I find balladic types of work often difficult to concentrate on... but this one had me eating out of the palm of it's hand and I almost WANTED to pick up on a forced or weak spot to make me falter... but there was none. Inspired and inspiring this most certainly is - both in execution and in soul-refreshing subject matter. I salute you, brave Poetess! TY LOL Kate xx
Reviewed by Miss Pandora (Reader)
Reviewed on August 11, 2006
Fable or not, this makes a wonderful composition. Powerful imagery and emotive thoughts combine well. Very nicely done indeed. Panda :)
We all certainly have our paths to walk. Unfortunately some are more riddled with holes and rocks than others.
This was excellently penned - I believe the best I've read of your work. The rhymne and rhythmn flowed graciously in the unfolding of what could almost be construed as Poetic flash fiction.
Outstanding pen, Chanti, and an outstanding witness to the God of genuine change and rebirth! Thank you for your beautiful heart, Chanti, which shares the message overcoming hope and joy!
Love, Rhonda
Reviewed by atti? _ (Reader)
Reviewed on August 9, 2006
I had trouble taking this seriously because the use of rhyme scheme gave it a "humpty dumpty" type of meter, and the content itself was to heavily reliant on the use of sequence for me. I use sequense as well, but I just feel like when a poems so dependent on storyline it takes away from things like emotion and diction, and to me those are some of the most important aspecs of poetry. So, I respect it for the craftmenship and the work put into it... But it's just not really my style of poetry. Sorry.
Ah the pleasure and immense emotion of a Chanti poem! Do you ever pen anything that isn't magical? I thought this was an amazing piece my friend. Love, Michelle
when one has the passion to change, there are no limitations to what can be achieved ...
extrememly well written, Chanti ...
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on August 9, 2006
A jailhouse confession to beat all jailhouse confession, Chanti! You made not one mistake within this lovely poem of redemption and love, not one. This old guy is smiling, thanking back, to my own . . . times of hell.
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on August 9, 2006
This has same errie, sad feel of Wildes Ballad of Reading Gaol..
Until the surprise redemption, and his life doing a 180 deg.
The message gently crept up on me, with thoughts of certain bible stories, and Peeps like Nic Cruz.
Aber say's it correct. Much gratitude indeed.
It reads better printed out too...
These lines bear powerful witness to the evolution of an exceptionally blessed soul. Much gratitude for the tremendous inspiration and the beautiful sharing--
Aberjhani
I changed the title from 'The Preacher' to 'The Prisoner' because I was concerned that readers might get the wrong idea about this poem. It is not intended to be a sermon but a message of hope. A story that touched me when I heard it and that I tried to relay accurately in poetic form. My own brother spent eight years in jail and so this is especially meaningful to me.
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Profound, enthralling, enigmatic...I am running out of adjectives,
though not out of praise for the brilliance of your work!
Reindeer
Cuddles
Regis
Love,
Eileen
God Bless
Michelle~
the poem. Thank you!! 'Pea' <3
This was excellently penned - I believe the best I've read of your work. The rhymne and rhythmn flowed graciously in the unfolding of what could almost be construed as Poetic flash fiction.
The picture looks like a young Viggo Mortenson.
In fraternity and poetic vision ...
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Love Tinka
Love, Rhonda
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
extrememly well written, Chanti ...
Until the surprise redemption, and his life doing a 180 deg.
The message gently crept up on me, with thoughts of certain bible stories, and Peeps like Nic Cruz.
Aber say's it correct. Much gratitude indeed.
It reads better printed out too...
Aberjhani
Outstanding work!
Love and hugs,
Tami
amazing!!!
speechless........loved it........into the library it goes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
pax A