Each night my eyes I stretched into telescopes And studied her from afar Observing fumes of passion Escaping from her soul Like energy radiating From a bright star
A galactic delight she was Sweeter than any star In the Milky Way Her toes were jeweled With 10 star sapphire ringlets That twinkled her name With every half-wink Of the moon’s left eye
The golden glow Of the North Star Illuminated from her halo And I wondered If I followed it Would it navigate My love towards her heart
Quickly she gathered stars Totaling half score And adorned my fingers With 10 rings of magic Made of glimmering stardust And a magician To the night sky I became And the stars paid me 100 twinkles of light To witness my acts Of midnight magic
But no rabbit Out of a hat Did I pull Instead out of her heart Her love I pulled And made it jump into mine Like it was a rabbit Ready to multiply
For some reason this reminds me of the song Severina by Mission UK ... where the gal dances across the stars. A very pretty write with a longing that crosses the universe.
You've got the cosmos by the tail, Handsum Hart! And you bring it to us... how beautiful..... thank you for sharing...
In Spirit,
Bear
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on December 8, 2003
Hi handsum....wow...you blew me away with this one..your line are so colorfully expressive....and the last verse is simply awesome...clap clap for this one....great writing....floria
This absolutely is delightful in every sense of the word, Handsum. I thoroughly enjoyed the metaphors, wonderful rhythm and rhyme. and the sweet loving message it carries. ~~Bonnie Q
Reviewed by Susan Sparks (Reader)
Reviewed on December 7, 2003
You are incredibly artistic and creative with all of your writes.
They seem to just keep getting gooder and more gooder!!
Susan Sparks
your comparisions really add flavor and life to this piece. I've noticed you enjoy putting the ladies on a pedestal -- which is a tradition of poets long ago and I'm glad to see you bringing it back to life. A pleasant nugget of a read.
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on December 7, 2003
This is stellar beauty to say the least... I love this one...
Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
Reviewed on December 7, 2003
Oooo a cosmically beautiful fantasy write!
Or...is it fantasy? ;O)
~Nikki~
The first instalment of The Tales of Bowen unfolds a mesmerizing anthology of narratives intricately woven together by a grand overarching storyline, set against the enchanting backdrop of the mystical realms of Dagonfell.
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Or Ron. Or whatever your artistic
genius demands for a moniker.
I liked this one a lot.
Cheers
Laura
In Spirit,
Bear
Carmen
Vesna :)
Love Tinka
They seem to just keep getting gooder and more gooder!!
Susan Sparks
Or...is it fantasy? ;O)
~Nikki~
Escaping from her soul
Like energy radiating
From a bright star
These just keep getting better!
Beautiful as always....
Trixie :)