Last two poems before the Spanish suitcase very sadly gets put back into the loft, then. Just two "odds" and "ends"... guess this is the "odd"-one! :)) K xx And - oops, sorry about the repeat Clint Eastwood thing, but, when I wrote it, this was the FIRST time I had thought of it and not the second!
LOCATION
The huge picture windows, opening inwards,
give out high up across a dry valley,
towards arid hilltops close by;
these are smeared with a haze of heat
and a grey-green stubble,
reminiscent of Clint Eastwood’s chin.
This is a spaghetti-western style villa
with décor haute Seville.
In the bathroom, where I’m sitting,
there are beach ceramics,
courtyard tiles and pool mosaics.
Designed for fine wine, candles and sharing,
it has twin sinks, double shower, team bath.
Stunning scenery from this WC
and the view from the bidet is better!
Brilliant... I DID fiddle about with the line breaks in the last 6 lines. And you're right about the use of verbs - probably not necessary. Thanks for these signals, TP! :))
Reviewed by Trainee Poet (Reader)
Reviewed on August 11, 2005
I like the way allowed it to slide gently to create an ambience in first stanza, but then suddenly that stanza break didnt work for me...I liked that naughty idea of Clint Eastwood's chin. In second strophe and first couplet after that you may consider weeding out those to be verbs. I like your wit and sense of humor! However I believe melding last two couplets with the triplet before them may make it even more hard hitting...
Kate, I have absolutely enjoyed reading your work from your trip and suitcase. This one made me laugh...lol...I think it was the bidet thingy..and the visuals that it brought to me. lollolol Thank you, Love, Leah
You keep it straight and simple Kate..and it works
My dad swore by the toilet being the only place he could get peace to read his paper !
Peter
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on August 10, 2005
LOL. Some WC's have the best view. The sea being the biggest one!
Never understood why the westerns are called spaghetti, as they were filmed in spain.
Never understood why the soundtrack was half a sec out of sync'?
Oh Sweet KATE this stirs the soul with longing for the past, a yearning for the present (especially in those surroundings)and a hope for the future. Last line really shook it up and i had images of you sitting on the bidet with the impish smile of yours. lol Love that image as much as I do your work.
The Wholly Book of Doo-Doo-Rot-on-Me is adult satirical humor featuring adult language and adult content, and the work is a parody of the Old Testament Book of Deuteronomy.
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Location, location, location! And you've penned it wonderfully! I love the view you've penned. :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :)
This is a delightful bit of whimsy!
Love,
Eileen
GR8 going, friend!
Trainee Poet
Reindeer
excellent desriptive write!
peace',
Rich Criso Suarez
And you'd be surprised at the inspiration and the many sonnets that started while sitting in my throne!
Carmen :-)
My dad swore by the toilet being the only place he could get peace to read his paper !
Peter
Never understood why the westerns are called spaghetti, as they were filmed in spain.
Never understood why the soundtrack was half a sec out of sync'?
Hugs,
Pops
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in america, karen lynn in texas. :D