Whoa, Jude! This goes straight to the "Tai-Tien" or "Hara",
it hits on the realization of the whole self as a single entity!But that isn't all, there is so much here...this poem needs to be taken in slowly to grasp all of its intense and soul touching meanings!
Really exceptional piece, Jude!
You are in a class by yourself with one magnificient poem after another that stirs the gray matter, or what's left of it, in my dome. I truly believe no matter how long you have been with a person you will never fathom what lies in their soul. You will get glimpses and many pieces to the puzzle but never be able to complete the mystery of this person that you know.
To thine own self be true and the rest will follow. If we can just look inside ourselves and simply observe and share who and what we are, it all seems to work and fall in its proper place. Your first stanza is a show stopper.
Jude, my head hurts again. Kate obviously gets it so I'm going to read her comment and your poem again. I do know that there's something of freedom in the balance between knowing and not knowing (and knowing you'll never really know) another. I have two very distinct emotional reactions fighting within me right now. On the one hand, it is beyond me how you seem to see a sort of intellectual distance as a positive. It just doesn't fit my view of why we're here, which has to do with a fuller experience. On the other hand, my heart is doing cartwheels at the second to last stanza - because, no matter how painful, this rings very true to my own experience with all sorts of relationships. I will have to keep this one awhile and mull it over. Stellar poetry. Dawn
An excellent fathoming of the Rubix cube of mind and emotion; trying to get a grip of one's own is bad enough (particularly when you inhabit at least two?!), but how it fits with another is usually a puzzle that takes time, effort and commitment to work out. All relationships need work and maintenance, but some just seem to slide into each other more naturally than others, I guess - like the coming together of Mother ship and space shuttle (... wonder which one of my minds thought of that one?!). Hmmm, I find this intensely cathartic; it always has amazed me that people seem to equate being "over-emotional" as giving full-rein to, or displaying fully one's emotions... I tend to think that the opposite is true: that people who are "over"-emotional are actually AFRAID of their feelings, and so bottle them out of the way. What I like about how I've read the interaction here is the grace, honour and liberty you bestow on the integrity of showing, and being allowed to show, emotional HONESTY - saying "this is how it is" without being either judged for it, or necessarily expecting/premeditating any sort of response in return. In fact, I love this. Have just realised that, as someone who has been circumstantially conditioned "not to feel" all my life - or to feel only that which others want me to - I have become more or less an emotional "freedom-fighter" - seeking to help others bring their feelings to light, and not to feel anything other than honest about them. After all, we can't help WHAT we feel - that's the truth, isn't it? It's what we then DO with the feelings that perhaps infringes the freedoms of others in our paths and circles. True "transmission" between hearts and souls can only come when there is this openness and clarity - and trust, perhaps. So, in a nutshell (!!) you're so right. Being totally honest with both self and another can only make for win-win. I knew there was a good reason for leaving your review until last today.... :)) One question, though: how can you "unveil feelings" and not experience them? Otherwise, "feeling" is a misnoma, init?!! I like the dynamic tension of the attract/repel magnetic tension in this exchange. As always, you have an uncanny ability to take the more-or-less abstract and chart it, like a map of the night sky. Night Night.. Kate xx
Blessed is he/she who can preceive a person's differences, respect their right of being who they choose by honoring their individuality and freedom of choice ... and still remain close! LOL, not so easy to do, is it? Most of us, are constantly changing/evolving, whether we realize it or not. Placing mental and physical limitations on our relationships allow us the freedom "to stay or flee." A very, intriguing write, Jude!
"and everything seemed to depend on knowing what we cannot observe"--great summation here! love the way you take "it" apart and quickly reassemble for a grand finish! well done, sir ace.
peace,
carolyn
Jude you seem to have captured that moment in a relationship where it is the do or die phase and yes it is because of the unveiling of all the little imperfections that must be accepted for love to finally grow.
Sometimes we are so intent upon understanding the deepness of the spirit of another, that we are unable to appreciate the animal of the human attached to that spirit; or vise/versa. We humans are dynamic beings in that we are spiritual and animal, a most confusing mix to be certain. The most difficult thing is to touch and be touched by both aspects simultaneously and to be able to appreciate both. Usually we miss the mark and learn to love only one or the other side of them and we must flee from a relationship where we cannot appreciate the entire package. Great write that stimulates deep analytical thinking on the part of the reader.
Take care,
Sherry
Such depth of perception is one thing, being able to convey it another. You do it with such ease,and beauty of phrase, which is what makes you a master poet in a class by yourself!
Awareness of profound relation in togetherness and dedication;
an independent and attached ring of the chain of union existing
by the light of eternity now... "Fleeing Each Other".
Enjoyed the reading of this masterpiece,
"Fleeing Each Other".
Robin Ouzman Hislop's poetry is certainly in dialogue with some of the key architects of the 'poetics of indeterminacy' – both the Modernist strands represented by the likes of Beckett and Stein, and the postmodernist strands represented, initially,
First Edition Translation of Teselas by Carmen Crespo X111 César Simón Poetry Prixe 2016 Translated from Spanish by Robin Ouzman Hislop and Amparo Arrospíde
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exceptional work..as always..
Vesna
as expected another masterly poem exploring in depth a quality of relation that enlightens and teaches.
Tarek
it hits on the realization of the whole self as a single entity!But that isn't all, there is so much here...this poem needs to be taken in slowly to grasp all of its intense and soul touching meanings!
Really exceptional piece, Jude!
peace and love, Carole
They say, " only opposites attract." Very well written.
We’re both the same
Yet uniquely different
A truly captivating piece, Jude.
I don't get it...wait, yes I do. Ummmm....no, I don't see the...wait, oh yeah - there it is. Okay, I get it...err...
Much like every relationship I've ever been in. Well sung fair bard, well sung.
Peace,
B
Carmen :-)
Yet uniquely different"
Blessed is he/she who can preceive a person's differences, respect their right of being who they choose by honoring their individuality and freedom of choice ... and still remain close! LOL, not so easy to do, is it? Most of us, are constantly changing/evolving, whether we realize it or not. Placing mental and physical limitations on our relationships allow us the freedom "to stay or flee." A very, intriguing write, Jude!
What we give to ourselves"
Great write!
peace,
carolyn
Regis
Felix
Take care,
Sherry
God bless,
Sandie.
Oh you know what I mean...excellent!!
Love Tinka
such depth and thought
A real masterpiece
Eileen
Awareness of profound relation in togetherness and dedication;
an independent and attached ring of the chain of union existing
by the light of eternity now... "Fleeing Each Other".
Enjoyed the reading of this masterpiece,
"Fleeing Each Other".
Never rest Your pen, Poet.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU