The gray sky finally released its rain
Driving down the East Side Drive
Gazing out the passenger window
You diligently eyeballed
The blur of opposing traffic
Splashing water
Onto the windshield
Blocking our view
This watershed moment of silence was so refreshing
“It’s so easy to believe nothing’s worth the effort”
You mumbled
In an exhausted attempt to again convince me
We were wasting our time
You looked a bit annoyed
As I nodded my head with appeasing eyebrows
Catching your expression of disdain
In the corner of my eyes
“’At least I’m not getting wet,’ you grumbled
And these dam puddles are really slowing us down.”
“What’s the rush?” I inquired
“Nothing. I’m just wondering
What will happen when we get there?”
“We’ll find out when we arrive.
Besides there’s really not much to worry about:
Like you said before,
You don’t believe anything can change your mind
Until it kicks you in the ass
So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine.”
Your laughter was unrelenting
As you continued to scratch you head
Looking into the side mirror
Of your driven frustration
Robert,
I like your natural or romantic poems like this. I like the feel of the journey. There is a message in this. We are in such a hurry today and so busy -- that the wonders, joys and simple pleasures are missed.
Thanks for the drive! I enjoyed it!
Marie
true life poeming, just like actually being. Reminds me of an incident that happened to me, my window was down on this rainy day, I was trying to get a little air, this big truck hit a puddle of water, it hit me right in the face
“We’ll find out when we arrive.
Besides there’s really not much to worry about:
Like you said before,
You don’t believe anything can change your mind
Until it kicks you in the ass
So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine.”
LOL. These two stanzas caused me to ponder that perhaps sometimes we don't want to believe. Sort of like when we suspect we're falling in love, we run from the realization, fearing the fall. ~~Nordette
Quite fancy Sage's covered wagon approach, meself. Sounds like time to form a circle lest those grizzlys sneak up and bite your ass... nothin worse than a bear behind, in my experience... frustratin, or what!? :)) A true-to-life rainy day exchange of weather notes, Jude; exact meaning caught up in the clouds. And I hope the drive-in movie's worth it when you get there... Don't sit on all the popcorn...
I'm trying to imagine the Drive conversation taking place in a covered wagon forging across Cumberland Gap where Daniel Boone would be saying to his woman, "What a road we have passed!" arduously making their way to Caintuck where Daniel Boone cited the "promised land."
"Killed a fine bear," did say Daniel Boone which I imagine the conversation went something just exactly like your lines,
“We’ll find out when we arrive.
Besides there’s really not much to worry about:
Like you said before,
You don’t believe anything can change your mind
Until it kicks you in the ass
So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine.”
Loved it...I am sure that this was written with a mastermind plan and a unique subject in mind...however it is so cleverly written that the reader may apply it to a variety of realistic situations, I can think of a few of my own...very creative and thought provoking...you are a fantastic artist my friend.
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
"...So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine."
Words of encouragement bring the frustrated women to a fit of laughter and confusion...
Give me more, Jude..."the Drive" is driving me crazy.
Well, if ya can't beat um', join um'HA!
Great write!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
A flash fiction great capture of a moment in time Robert. truly entertaining!
I guess for me the pivotal moment was the encouragement to not let anything sneak up on you from behind. Of course there is so much wisdom and truth in that exhortation, but how can you avoid it without constantly looking behind you?
the conversational approach was perfect to convey your thoughts in this poem. we learn so much about the character and quirkiness of the passenger and driver here. superb writing, Jude, with tone and mood well-achieved. Dawn
I love and hate a questionable ending. I want to hear more! It sounds kind of like dialogue between a father and daughter. Terrific and very different write. I enjoyed this very much.
Such a captured essence of a dreary day and conversation that holds the reader to want more.
You always deliver.
Pier
Reviewed by J M (Reader)
Reviewed on December 1, 2006
Poetic Gem.
Reviewed by Miss Pandora (Reader)
Reviewed on December 1, 2006
..somehow I feel your glass is mostly half full,...nothing worse than the drone of a Job's comforter is there?...the lighthearted lift is superb! Still smiling, Panda :)
The paranoia of love, in a deep relationship, makes us edgy at times.
The rain always gives a good poet thoughts so deep that some don't understand us at all. You are so good at the wordsmith thing. I sure admire you.
It's pouring here...rain, outside, is making music.
Susan
Again, you've been peeking into my life, while living yours. This is a delightful journey into the mind of another; written with the skill of a master. Quite different and readable.
- Bill
A poignant poem, Robert. I like how you've left it up to your readers as to what it's about -- they can interject their own problems. The laughter at the end makes one feel the situation may not be hopeless. Well done.
Love,
CJ
Intrique at it's poetic best, is this a desparate attempt to recapture what once was or just a break from boredom of the senses, I will hope for a follow up to this one my friend, perhaps entitled "The Arrival".
Fee
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on December 1, 2006
Beckets Waiting for Godott. This has that same futile or maybe not quality.. I really enjoyed this....
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I like your natural or romantic poems like this. I like the feel of the journey. There is a message in this. We are in such a hurry today and so busy -- that the wonders, joys and simple pleasures are missed.
Thanks for the drive! I enjoyed it!
Marie
Enjoyed the true-to-life character portrayals and the clever humor!
Love, Rhonda
Besides there’s really not much to worry about:
Like you said before,
You don’t believe anything can change your mind
Until it kicks you in the ass
So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine.”
LOL. These two stanzas caused me to ponder that perhaps sometimes we don't want to believe. Sort of like when we suspect we're falling in love, we run from the realization, fearing the fall. ~~Nordette
Ron
That last line slapped all the rest of them into place.
Carole
"Killed a fine bear," did say Daniel Boone which I imagine the conversation went something just exactly like your lines,
“We’ll find out when we arrive.
Besides there’s really not much to worry about:
Like you said before,
You don’t believe anything can change your mind
Until it kicks you in the ass
So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine.”
Sage
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
TRASK
"...So just make sure nothing sneaks up on you
From behind
And you’ll do just fine."
Words of encouragement bring the frustrated women to a fit of laughter and confusion...
Give me more, Jude..."the Drive" is driving me crazy.
Well, if ya can't beat um', join um'HA!
Great write!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
but like others said it is engaging and stimulating
Brett
I guess for me the pivotal moment was the encouragement to not let anything sneak up on you from behind. Of course there is so much wisdom and truth in that exhortation, but how can you avoid it without constantly looking behind you?
Light and Wisdom ...
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Love Tinka
Until it kicks you in the ass
Love those lines, Robert!
You always deliver.
Pier
Rusty
The rain always gives a good poet thoughts so deep that some don't understand us at all. You are so good at the wordsmith thing. I sure admire you.
It's pouring here...rain, outside, is making music.
Susan
- Bill
Love,
CJ
Fee
My favourite line of this Driven poem...
Love, Suzie :-D