Powerful imagery here my friend, an intriguing write indeed! Your words allow the reader to envision a person whom has experienced heartache, and lonliness, a part of life that we all face at one time or another in our lives. Enjoyed this much, you've expressed it well!
Blessings,
Joyce B.
This is a supreme study of what, to my reading, is your observation - acute yet sensitive, as always - of someone's self-induced hell - the kind that freezes circle after tightly held circle of "negative temperament of sentiment" within. Brrrrr, indeed... but what a masterpiece, dear Jude - both poetic and of insight. I love the image of the "seasonal displacement" - one that I know (and hope your subject will soon come to realize) is totally wo/man made and therefore... within her/his/our own power to correct - and let spring come and be, naturally, spring.
Love & {{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}
Alexandra*
Another powerful piece of writing. A glacier of creativity and vivid emotion flow into this poem. I loved the seasonal contrast too, well penned! I think I'll just grab my jacket.
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on May 26, 2007
Getting a bit of a chill while I am in here today. As always you have captured the essence of this emotion exceptionally well.
Your images are vivid,Jude and the atmosphere chilling. It seems that there is little hope of a seasonal thaw for this heart shrouded in ice. Outstanding!
Take care,
Sherry
Reviewed by Stan Grimes (Reader)
Reviewed on May 26, 2007
You paint an interesting picture here. Great write.
Wow I can feel the chill in this
Stunning write
have re-read this several times
and the feeling of a cold heart keeps
coming into my mind!
Outstanding write keep warm my friend
Get her near to the fire place
Love and Peace to you always...Morning Star
... Get your clothes on, John... that might help! :)) Just call me contrary and left-handed, which undoubtedly I am, but the tone of this beautifully descriptive and observational write seems entirely mellow and warm to me. To me, that first quartrain is delightfully ambiguous, making me think that your subject is usually of a very positive, open and welcoming disposition. Thus it follows, given the mercurial and delicate imagery you have chosen of skating, this person will probably like as not as quickly find his or her way out of that snowhole as he or she fell into it! The key to this train of thought is in the title and your reference strongly to "Today". This leaves me actually feeling nothing but refreshment and hope... like a good chilly blast CAN instill into us sometimes! And the "hands off" approach is entirely compatible with the arch-independence of the one whose self-reflection calls for tears to be shed in isolation. I agree with those who have picked up on the sense of intimacy interwoven between the speaker and the observed. Non-intervention is sometimes the most loving act one good friend can bestow upon another, but this awareness can only usually happen between those who know each other well; in this instance, neither feels that they are left alone and out in the cold.
As a PS, I am intrigued that this is possibly the first time you have modified "dreams" with the descriptor of "far-fetched". To my mind, dreams, in your book, are always entirely feasible... otherwise they are illusions! :)) Just a personal observation...
Gorgeous empathy in this write. Well, I think so, anyways. LOL K xx
YIKES! The ice person cometh! There is a message in this that I believe everyone can relate too. Give them a one way ticket to the shores of Greenland.
"Even in spring, your words
Steam the frost-bitten
Panes of thoughts
Residing behind the windows of your eyes"
This is really excellent imagery Jude.
Richard
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on May 25, 2007
Sounds like a jilted person..All part of life...
Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*® (Reader)
Reviewed on May 25, 2007
Dear Ace,
I sense that this person is someone whom you care deeply about and would love to unthaw that frozen heart.
Times like Icy Moments require the Hudson's Bay Blanket, those stripes of red, green, yellow, black, and white honor diversity and the colors in each of us...Trail of Tears, Bury My Heart at Wounded Knee "of uncomfortable and bitter moments"...this is a "trading post" write...a blanket measures the whole worth of the relationship, making it a high standard for all else...warmth to you, Jude...
Sharp, crisp imagery comes through the screen and wraps chilly fingers around the heart. Dang, but this is deeply emotive poetry, excellence bar none! Well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Saving this to read again and again, especially on hot days. :)
Ice tears, bitter ones, like diamonds others, but the cold will affect each and everyone of them if left in solitude.
The ice moment when one reads, Dear John...
The poem has few words, but it says volumes.
Georg
Perhaps a space-heater might warm the void of vacuous extremes:) or in the least, maybe just a tad of logical non-combustive insulation to adjust to varied climates. Brrr...but the view is spectacular !!!
Great write Jude, enjoyed!!!
Your imagery is always so amazing,I felt a breath of winter through my monitor;-)superb portrait of one whose mood is caught in the numbness of a deep freeze...
Think I might just go hop into my water bed LOL, tis cold enuff here as it is...
Excellent analogies Jude, you sure have a fair dinkum gift for writing those, MEH, I's strain a blood vessel thinking what you write sometimes my friend LOL.
xxCh'erie
A further collection of poems, many from years in the Middle East, but also the California San Francisco and Central Coast areas (Santa Cruz, Carmel, Big Sur, Berkeley, etc.).
Contraband Marriage, traveling along the hemline of loving after incarceration, is a love story written in lyric and free form, set in reality with a different ever after.
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missed not visiting your den..
I've been ill ..but I'm back!
Vesna
Cool.
Ron
steam the frost-bitten panes of thoughts -- what a string of words.
Emotions can flip the seasons.
Kathy
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Love & {{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}
Alexandra*
Jude, as always, your poetry awes and amazes me.
Write ON!
Jools :)
Peace,
Carolyn
Take care,
Sherry
The imagery is superb
Peace on to you
William
Chrissy
The imagery in this one is outstanding. Awesome write, Jude.
~hugs~
Karen
Stunning write
have re-read this several times
and the feeling of a cold heart keeps
coming into my mind!
Outstanding write keep warm my friend
Get her near to the fire place
Love and Peace to you always...Morning Star
As a PS, I am intrigued that this is possibly the first time you have modified "dreams" with the descriptor of "far-fetched". To my mind, dreams, in your book, are always entirely feasible... otherwise they are illusions! :)) Just a personal observation...
Gorgeous empathy in this write. Well, I think so, anyways. LOL K xx
Love Tinka
"Even in spring, your words
Steam the frost-bitten
Panes of thoughts
Residing behind the windows of your eyes"
This is really excellent imagery Jude.
Richard
I sense that this person is someone whom you care deeply about and would love to unthaw that frozen heart.
Love & Light always and in all ways,
Joseph*
Sage
Amazing poetry. Your imagery here is superb! I can feel the chill in the air! Outstanding!
Many blessings,
~Linda
Thanks,
George
haven't happened to have looked in my eyes lately?
enjoyed very much!!!
Sharp, crisp imagery comes through the screen and wraps chilly fingers around the heart. Dang, but this is deeply emotive poetry, excellence bar none! Well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Saving this to read again and again, especially on hot days. :)
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Fee
The ice moment when one reads, Dear John...
The poem has few words, but it says volumes.
Georg
Great write Jude, enjoyed!!!
Edwin
Eileen
think "warmth" from this den of your deep thoughts Bro. Jude,
cynth'ya
Excellent analogies Jude, you sure have a fair dinkum gift for writing those, MEH, I's strain a blood vessel thinking what you write sometimes my friend LOL.
xxCh'erie
Peace,
Dan
Be safe,
Karen