wheeze (poem) by jude forese on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on April 5, 2012

Will your finality be only a final wheeze or will you succumb with an exposive sneeze...geez...e

Reviewed by Carolyn Red Bear (The Bear Paw)

Reviewed on April 4, 2012

Jude, Jude, Jude!!! I feel every letter you write here, knowing that you could even be writing about me. But others feel the same when they read you. You are a true gift that you can write on a deep level of humanity. Thank you, thank you, as I bow to your gift. ;)

In Spirit,
Bear

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Reviewed on April 4, 2012

... respire, exhale, inhale, howl, breathe, gag, suffocate, wheeze... all your various in-and-out-takes of breath here are as precarious and rickety as that maladjusted fan, Amigo, creaking, humming and circulating its malevolent dust. This version is so much stronger than the first and you have made some good and bold moves in re-writing it. It seems to me that you have used the first draft as a strong foundation on which to construct this next. I love how you stress the difference between having your voice "suffocated" and you conversely "holding your breath"; the former suggestive of having life taken from you, the latter of your desire to "hold onto breath" and therefore escape. I also like the potential for dead-pan humour or synicism here: life being just a "wheeze", a trick, a sick joke even, perhaps... Don't listen to that ol' fan... He's just muddying the waters with rumour and speculation, making a parody of life! And so onwards to dream juice (m) we go... xx

Reviewed by RWE SAYS BYE (Reader)

Reviewed on April 4, 2012

we's all in this together... that's the 'we's' that matters most!

Reviewed by C. McGovern-Bowen

Reviewed on April 3, 2012

my, my, jude, how you do cheer me up...
yet another pithy perfect write, poet.
stay well,
carolyn

Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg

Reviewed on April 3, 2012

words easily escape your pen, as always breathe on :)

Reviewed by Morgan Merriweather

Reviewed on April 2, 2012

the blurry dilemma, I relate to that, blowing bubbles in the wind and pop. thoughts splattered. ~ Morgan

Reviewed by Amor Sabor

Reviewed on April 2, 2012

It is still a voice that must not be silenced by the conflicts of this world. Excellent verses.

Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope)

Reviewed on April 2, 2012

Jude

When I hear the word "Wheeze" I remember Mogadishu b�coz I thought that only bullets wheeze. Now a friend is determined to breathe till the last wheeze. Love the thoughts of your beautiful mind.

Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader)

Reviewed on April 1, 2012

wheeze all with ya, Jude.

Reviewed by David Young

Reviewed on April 1, 2012

In every inhaling word here is this exhaling power of your verse.

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on March 31, 2012

I only wheezed recently with the flu. But I sense your looking at a much larger loss of breath in the way humanity is squeezed to serve its master, the hierarchy of money.

Ron

Reviewed by Terry Rizzuti

Reviewed on March 30, 2012

Keep on keeping on, as we used to say.

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on March 30, 2012

Keep Breathing - it's much better than the alternative.

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

HeyJude, There is something going on here. I am either having a Deja Vu experience or I am losing my mind. Somehow, I feel that you have already written this poem and I remember commenting on it previously, but I tried to find it and there is nothing in your den. So help me here, you have re edited this one haven't you?

At any rate, if I am in another dimension, I will comment once more,

Your voice is a loud and clear, it rings true, it is truth, and it is a voice of a true poet!!!!!

Much peace, light, and love,

Amber

Reviewed by John Flanagan

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

air not only in several forms
but in emotional dimensions
we breathe our very souls

for me, Jude, the title is a little ironic
but of course our last breath is usually a
whimper, a fade, a wheeze

stay well

john

Reviewed by Christine Tsen

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

Fabulous voice and nuances, Jude! Every breath is a gift.

Reviewed by Jon Willey

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

jude, this is fine work - Vivian Dawson has captured the exact impressions I was going to share, perhaps better than I could have expressed them myself - I wish you love and peace my dear friend - Jon Michael

Reviewed by Vivian Dawson

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

Never take a breath for granted...
inhale from your soul and exhale
from your heart until a final comes!!
Enlightment received *Jude*

Lady Vivian

Reviewed by T Jett (Reader)

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

There was a time when I felt as though I was suffocating until someone dear showed me how to breathe again ...

Reviewed by Christine Alwin

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

Make every breath count and your voice be heard!

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

You are singing my sing, Jude. I am one of those old men "screaming into the darkness." We came into this world screaming, I suppose it is only natural we leave it the same way. Still . . . Some of us scream with different voices and hope it makes a difference.

Reviewed by Mary Ann Biddinger

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

The fan above to off key imagery to always keep your
voice in the world through your thoughts and verses.
Lady Mary Ann

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on March 29, 2012

You give a whole new meaning to the "wheeze" this is just great,glad you decided to keep wheezing,along with the rest of us;-)

Reviewed by Jms Bell

Reviewed on March 28, 2012

I BELIEVE THE VERY BEST COMES FORTH FROM POETS, WHEN THEY ARE 'WHEEZING'. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS