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Diamonds And Dust
by Leo Durrant → (All Poetry by Leo Durrant)
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I had a high school teacher critique a poem by saying that no one capitalizes the first letter of each line any more. In retaliation, I wrote this:



 

          THere are bars in my window,
     THe only window in my wall --
     THe wall
     THat I built within
     THe desolate desert dust
     THat was my only companion during
     THose long, sun-dried teenage summers --
     THe wall
     THat I built brick by self-fired brick to be
     THe protector from
     THe harsh sun's fire and
     THe marauders
     THat stormed my ego fortress --
     THe wall that served me well,
     THat stood tall and straight and
     THick all
     THese long years --
     THe wall
     THat kept out
     THe bitter enemies and
     THe would-be friends.
     THen you came with that
  wrecking ball smile
          and those diamond-tipped eyes that
        drilled through the hard crust
            of a sun-fired soul
         leaving rubble in their wake
            exposing me to a new type of sun
                one that doesn't bake and burn
       but one that warms and melts
                       and I melted
            and I thought you melted too
                    but diamonds don't melt
         and I was the rubble in your wake
       when you left
               but
     there are some good bricks here in
     The ruins -- enough to start
     THe rebuilding process
     THere is mortar enough, and
     THere is plenty of time.
     THere is nothing but time.

          Nothing.

               But . . .


 
     
  

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 Reviews of "Diamonds And Dust"
Reviewed by Bernice Angoh
Reviewed on March 12, 2008
How I love your words! This is very beautiful Leo.

Reviewed by Amy Feemster
Reviewed on February 26, 2008
Very well said. The walls I built to protect myself are sometimes all that I have left. You've stated something that I've felt personnally and I always need more mortar. Great expressive! Amy.

Reviewed by Axilea MU
Reviewed on February 10, 2008
I was hypnotized by the format, the actual shape that looks like the wordfalls, one expects perpetual movement. Some chaos too. The words' meaning, or rather my interpretation, is entirely linked to what I see because of the strong visual impact this poem has.



Intriguing work!



Axilea

Reviewed by Michael Guy
Reviewed on January 27, 2008
Nice pen that many can relate to: "the one who comes into our life with that "wrecking ball smile" (great line!) and leaves us in ruins - but no matter how strong the wall it's gonna crumble again sometime - Great title.
best, michael guy

Reviewed by Randall Barfield
Reviewed on January 27, 2008
The only valid critic is the public. Someone said that but which artist escapes me. Nevertheless, an interesting endeavor.

Reviewed by William Cryer (Reader)
Reviewed on January 27, 2008
Leo, I read this a few times through, and still I came away with that similar experience when reading much of your other poems--that somehow it's a lot more complex and layered than I realize. Perhaps I'm just admitting to being an ignoramus, though the bits that I do fathom I enjoy most splendiferously. Or maybe--don't laugh--it's that reading some of your lines evokes similar sensations of gazing at a page of html--the way you structure your lines. Like dropping code onto a page. Ah well...as wordpress infamously asserts: code is poetry. Yours is definitely poetry.

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
Reviewed on January 26, 2008
wow--what a wonderful write-so well expressed as emotions run deep

Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on January 26, 2008
Nothing, but... genius.

Ron

Reviewed by Cryssa C
Reviewed on January 26, 2008
hee, hee, hee...
Boy would I love to know if I had that same teacher!

I love the poem, the form, and the message. It's shape only enhances the meaning.
Cryssa

Reviewed by Charlie
Reviewed on January 26, 2008
Oh, Oh, Oh... WOW! I absolutely love this! I love that I can see the rebuilding process going on-- the shifting mortar at the end, and that separated elipses. . . (in bold) and what's interesting, is that the wall is so rigid-- so visible, that though you read and reread the first part of the poem, the words just pile up behind the wall and don't really sink in-- so true-to-life. A great write! --Charlie

Reviewed by blue soplain (Reader)
Reviewed on January 26, 2008
egads; arent you the clever chap :}
love the smart-aleckiness of the rebuke ANd i love the message and format of this. . . the way it smears the words in the middle of all that structure. ..all that post-mortar resurrection, a renaissance of the relational sort. ..of mind...of love even. .
some sort of willing destruction---
and even more perfect is the end. .. .so 0pen....left...
left.. .
just left.. .
i really really like this. ..

ness

p.s. what a doofus teacher~ so haughty in her pseudo.avant-garde.ness


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