AuthorsDen.com   Join | Login    
Where Authors and Readers come together!

SIGNED BOOKS    AUTHORS    BOOKS    SAMPLE CHAPTERS    AUDIOBOOKS    eBOOKS    STORIES    ARTICLES    POETRY    BLOGS    NEWS    VIDEOS    SUCCESS    TESTIMONIALS

Featured Authors:  D. Enise, iLisa Loucks Christenson, iJennifer Miller, iRoger Vizi, iShirley Woods, iChristine Boyce, iMary Lynn Plaisance, iPaul Lonardo, iTrennis Killian, iCharles Keller, i

  Home > Relationships > Poetry        Popular: Books, Stories, Articles, Poetry        Authors: A B C D E F G H I J K L M N O P Q R S T U V W X Y Z     

Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

 Follow Me  

· Contact Me
· Poetry
· Stories
· 454 Titles
· 9,961 Reviews
· Save to My Library
· Share with Friends!
·
Member Since: Sep, 2002

Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie, click here to update your pages on AuthorsDen.



The Conversation
by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie → (All Poetry by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie)
  
Share   Print  Save   Follow   Share on Facebook

*This poem was inspired by the last line in Kate Clifford’s Poem,
“My Fated Path”


The Conversation:




He told her:

“I am numb,
Undone,
Can’t see the sun…”

I told her:

“I had to go-
Get away,
Just no way,
I could stay…”

He told her:

“I got nothing to live for,
All I did was try to help,
All it did was get me thrown out!"


I told her:

“I could not bear to hear him shout-
Everything I did was bad,
All he did was make me sad…”

He told her:

“I no longer want to live,
All I did was give-
No reason for me to stay,
Think I want to die today…”

I told her:

“I will go to him and see,
If I can make him let it be-
No reason to die,
We were both living a lie…”

He told her:

“You can’t stop me,
Neither will she,
Why don’t both of you,
Just let me be!”

I told her:

“I don’t want him dead!
Just couldn’t bear the words he said-
I won’t let him die,
But neither will I lie…”

He told her:

“I am numb
Undone,
Can’t see the sun…”

I told her:

“I can’t stop crying,
But I’m tired of trying…”

He told her:

“Can’t feel a thing anymore…”

I told her:

“I can’t stay!”

We both heard her say:
“Sometimes,
Love isn’t enough…”


The silence was deafening,
As I walked out the door…







Want to review or comment on this poem?


Need a FREE Reader Membership?


 Reviews of "The Conversation"
Reviewed by William Bonilla
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
A wonderful write into excellet poetry

William

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
well done to kate who gave you this ACE Idea...very well done to you too

love
tinka

Reviewed by Netta Jack (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
WOW!!! This is a new way of expressing oneself and you have done it oh so well. Excellent write. Kudos for originality.

Reviewed by Buddy Angel
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Very good write Retta.

Reviewed by Tony Nerone (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Dear Retta, There is no end to your brilliance. This writing was Sublime.


love yf
tony

Reviewed by Christine Morell
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
A wonderful, creative piece reindeer. Excellent work.
Chrissie

Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
well Reindeer...Kate inspired you real good! beautiful work

Reviewed by Joel Raja Kumar J (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Shows your wonderful Talent, Retta

Love from India - Joel -

Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
i like this but you may wish to play with form: the "he said, i said we said" stuff becomes too predictable and you may want to throw in some variation

Reviewed by na na (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
I loved the creativity Retta. You included dialogue, and this was good. You are willing to experiment and this is very good. Keep it up. Hugs Bill

Reviewed by E T Waldron
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Reindeer, this shows your wonderful creativity and diversity...

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Love the dialouge, and can relate to deafening silence, great write


New Poetry by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Popular Poetry (Relationships)
  1.  If my Dad knew
  2.  Christian Friendship
  3.  Budding Relationships
  4.  Me and You
  5.  Good-bye
  6.  Mind Fog
  7.  SURROUNDED
  8.  Keep Me Safe
  9.  Between Crescent Moons
  10.  Along the Wayside
  11.  The meaning of love
  12.  Life As I Now Know It
  13.  Your Fascist Heart!
  14.  A Simple Hug
  15.  When Dreams Come True
  16.  Ode To My Cat Woman
  17.  That Darn Bumble Bee
  18.  When A Man Loves A Woman
  19.  Happily Ever After
  20.  Serenity
Free Book Review Program
Select a book to read and review today!

How to Be Happy Partners: Working it out Together by Tina Tessina

How to Be Happy Partners is the perfect tool for designing and creating a relationship unique to your individual personalities and situation. Written by the authors of How to Be a Couple and Still Be Free, this is a clear and concise handbook on how  
Member BookAds

Toxic Relationships - Abuse and its Aftermath by Sam Vaknin

How to identify abuse, cope with it, survive it, and deal with your abuser.  
Member BookAds

Pathological Narcissism FAQs by Sam Vaknin

Dozens of Frequently Asked Questions regarding Pathological Narcissism, relationships with abusive narcissists, and the Narcissistic Personality Disorder.  
Member BookAds