He must be a boy,
For his passions burst upon you,
Like a super nova,
Setting afire and melting,
All who draw near him,
Wearing them thin with his white hot anger,
And scathing words,
Seeking not to bring peace,
But carve his truth upon their souls,
For all to see and believe…
This boy,
Who I came to know and love,
As a dear and troubled friend,
His life an agony filled with such hate,
I tried to teach him how to bend,
To look another way,
But his poison leaked into me,
And I am sick today…
Grandfather says,
“You have harbored the snake,
And it has bitten you,
Now what is it you need to do?”
Wise old man he always was,
And I learn from all he does…
But the snake was so pretty I tell him,
So smooth and silky soft,
I wanted to watch it molt,
Shed its skin,
And begin anew…
But wise old elder tells me true ,
“Doesn’t matter that the skin is new,
Its soul is still the snake you knew.
Now what is it that you need to do?”
How deeply I wept such tears of dread,
And drew my knife
For the wound needed to be bled-
Cut and sucked the poison from my soul,
Let the evil drain so I could forget what I know,
But the secret of the snake lies in me still,
For his poison was an evil that nearly drilled,
Into the deepest part of me,
But my eyes are open and now I see,
The secret of the snake is no longer a mystery,
It follows the course of nature only,
Doesn’t matter that I was lonely,
Seeking a friend among you all…
I took the snake and set it beyond my garden wall,
Watched as it slithered away,
Knowing it would be back someday,
But I am ready now and know what I must do-
Grandfather whispers;
“Reindeer it can never be true to you,
It is Te me chaw,
And only being true to its form…”
But in my heart there gathers a storm,
Wave after wave of sweet regret,
Knowing that I must somehow forget,
The dream of harboring this snake,
Within my garden gate…
Hi Reindeer,
Glad you told me about this one....
Yes, I see what
you're saying...
True oh so true...
This is really outstanding...
Love & Hugs
Trixie :)
Reviewed by Jimmy Mills (Reader)
Reviewed on May 4, 2003
Rein--It is so wonderful how you express your true feelings in words that flow so well together. You are a pro at darkness and I respect everything you do. Keep your head up my friend. A masterpiece at best. LC
this is rare and i so relate to it, i'm really heartened to read such rich writing, specially since i spent the day with native americans, telling stories! this poem makes me want to write more on this very topic. the true test of good writing: i dream the writers dream and continue. you must be kindred, hello sistah!
<Spinning in circles under the pale moonlight> Wahooo Rhetta this is SUPER DUPER...what a SPlENDID read...grandfather is right! ;O)
(((((((((HUGS)))))))))
~Nikki~
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
retta,
this is excellent
"
Seeking a friend among you all…
I took the snake and set it beyond my garden wall,
Watched as it slithered away,
Knowing it would be back someday,
But I am ready now and know what I must do- "
so much meaning in verses
Peggy
Retta dear glad to hear there are more than one garden with that bad snake....Love Tinka
Reviewed by Dove (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
Love the spiritual wise soul in you who always restores me to the ways of mother root..Love you..
Dove ~
Reviewed by Adam Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
Today's hard lessons are tomorrow's easy advice.
Adam
Reviewed by James David Compton (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
Beautiful and mystic.
My grandfather spoke in a much simpler fashion, "When you lay down with dogs, you get up with fleas."
Sometimes all the scratching in the world won't relieve that itch.
-James
Reviewed by Madame X (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
Very good message here. I enjoyed this poem.
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on May 3, 2003
To let go is one of the hardest lessons on our path. Especially to let go of dreams of changes in snakes we cared about. This is a great write with a great deal of wisdom in it. I would love to sit and listen to your grandfather's wisdom.
Retta,
I have so long been waiting for this piece, I knew you had in you!
This is sensational, nay, brilliant, layered in bewildering depth beyond the grasp of your average man....and yet, my oh my. Well done I say! bravo, grand piece! Just Grand, I shall not halt my praise till I have had my fill! Bravo
Rodney Evan Bohen
Reindeer, This to me is your best, although I hesitate, with all you have done, to say that. It's just that I find this as close to perfection as one can get, in all aspects of a poem!Bravo!
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Glad you told me about this one....
Yes, I see what
you're saying...
True oh so true...
This is really outstanding...
Love & Hugs
Trixie :)
outstanding reading
William
Love Angie
(((((((((HUGS)))))))))
~Nikki~
this is excellent
"
Seeking a friend among you all…
I took the snake and set it beyond my garden wall,
Watched as it slithered away,
Knowing it would be back someday,
But I am ready now and know what I must do- "
so much meaning in verses
Peggy
excellent write Reindeer....
Yet It Is That Human Snake You Must Watch Out For!
TRASK
Your work, Retta.
lyf
tony
Dove ~
Adam
My grandfather spoke in a much simpler fashion, "When you lay down with dogs, you get up with fleas."
Sometimes all the scratching in the world won't relieve that itch.
-James
I have so long been waiting for this piece, I knew you had in you!
This is sensational, nay, brilliant, layered in bewildering depth beyond the grasp of your average man....and yet, my oh my. Well done I say! bravo, grand piece! Just Grand, I shall not halt my praise till I have had my fill! Bravo
Rodney Evan Bohen