I do not claim for this series to be "real" haiku. As well, we've only had a skiff of snow here thus far. Most of this is remembered from my childhood on the prairies and from past cold spells here.
Snow (haiku)
Snow is in the air There’s a hush before the storm Anticipation
From a sky of lead Silver crystals start to fall Dust from angels' hands
The woods are silent All creatures have sought refuge As the first snow falls
The snowfall over The moon rises to reveal A land of magic
Freshly fallen snow Sparkles in the morning sun A flawless landscape
Snow-laden cedars Bow their boughs towards the earth Silent sentinels
In the aftermath The wind shapes the drifts like dunes A desert of snow
Thrusting through the snow Golden stalks of brittle grass A harp for the wind
Snow adds to winter A magical element And wonder besides
I like to imagine the snowflakes and know that each one is different especially since we are all different. What a dull world it would be if we were all the same. Snowflakes are precious to me falling on my nose in Winter.
Such breezy, pleasant and creative verse - it somehow instills the magic of winter in the heart of the reader. I really like 'A harp for the wind' - most evocative.
Oh, how I wish I could see snow like the one you are describing "silver crystals", "magic", "flawless". But here, in the city, snow becomes slush and dirty. I like the idea that the wind has its own harp! Nice!
This is indeed a good poem, but not really a haiku in the traditional, or even non traditional sense of haiku. Haiku are indeed very difficult to write, but the fun is staying within the rules of haiku. Good job, flow, and word usage..
Excellent Regis! I enjoyed the read and Vow! What a beautiful picture!
Very interesting! Keep on writing and sharing Regis and may the Lord send His ministering angel to minster unto you!
"A desert of snow"--- j'aime ca. Je rappele mon enfance quand j'ai arrive a l'Europe. Et j'ai fais la connaissance d'hiver. Quelque difference entre le neige la-bas et le soleil eternel a 'Afrique ou je suis nee! C'ete terrible pour moi et j'ete malade tout l'hiver, mais le neige est vraiment jolie et tres beau. Il y an une chanson de Jacques Brel qui s'appele: "Il neige" et qui expresse le meme magique, mais un peu plus melancholiquement.
J'aime votre poeme car il n'a pas peur de cette joie sincere qui est preservee dans le coeur toujours ouvert d'un enfant qui est ravie de ce qui il vois.
Merci beaucoup,
Mahdi
Reviewed by Joshua Miller (Reader)
Reviewed on January 1, 2005
cool haiku, get it?
Reviewed by Sage Writer (Reader)
Reviewed on December 20, 2004
Awesome description of snow in winter. It makes you cherish nature in her magnificent wonderment. The pic is great but your words are like a slide show.
Reviewed by Desiree Baker (Reader)
Reviewed on December 12, 2004
Arn't we lucky Canadians to be living in such a beatiful land of snow? Unforantly I live down in the city where we get no snow. I really loved this, it gives you a beautiful picture of the land we live in.
*canuck Hugs*
-des
Reviewed by Karen Chalfant (Reader)
Reviewed on December 8, 2004
This is beautiful! Something I'd love to see. Won't happen here in Houston though. Well done, Regis!
Wonderfully descriptive. While I really hate Winter, oddly enough I love snow...at least for a while. Always a pleasure reading your works, Regis. Good things to you, sir.
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on December 7, 2004
Your word choice was very sensual, I could really feel the cold, see the sights, hear the sounds, I like that- plus, I love snow anyway, so this poem gives me a good feeling...but that's because it's written well.
A "skiff" of snow - I like that! Very onamatopaeic (??!!) This sounds like the kind of stuff we can enjoy - unlike the grey, soggy slush we get back here! I especially loved the golden stalks of brittle grass being a harp for the wind. Can just hear you out in the moonlight calling with the silver fox of an evening, Regis!! Reminds me of a Frank Zappa lyric - but I won't go down that route! Time to get the tin trays out again...!! TY Kate xx
Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader)
Reviewed on December 4, 2004
I really love that first snowfall and when it covers everything it really is like the poem here. Nice work.
Bingo reminds me of living in chicago, New Jersey and South Dakota. First snow fall is always wonderful before it turns black and you learn which neighbors have dogs and where they go when they go outside
regis, I'm in a winter wonderland reading your snow haikus - just beautiful. Theodore Roethke was a great US poet who could do this
thing well, too: 'Is it enough the sun loosening the frost on December windows? I'm tired of tiny noises/the April's cheeping/the vireo's insistence/the prattle of the young no longer pleases.... and so forth.
Each of these Haiku is excellent! You have captured the magic and beauty of our surroundings blanketed in a fresh fallen snow! So serene! I love the way you have strung these Haiku together to create this beauty!
Just beautiful Regis.....I particularly love the analogy of snow and "dust from angel's hands".....I think that may be what I thought it was too when I was little. Snow is indeed magical - like a big puffy white quilt over the landscape. Stunning poetry!
Regis, Snow just puts a feeling of serenity and magic in the hearts and minds of all. I can see it certainly inspired you way beyond just a first snowfall.
All of these are beautiful, and now it makes me long even moreso for our one and only snowfall...
Yes we get snow in Texas..but it usually falls and is gone before the sunsets..or rises,,whichever time of the day or night it falls!
Great work Regis!
Dear Regis,
Each haiku that makes up this collection is beautiful in of its own. I read them more than once and marvelled at your ability to create such wondrous images. I feel like the child with her nose pressed to the window pane, gazing in rapt wonder at a world transformed.
I live in a country where snow is a rarity but remember my years living in Switzerland and the beauty of that landscape draped with winter white.
I can't express my admiration enough. Please don't be put off by your critics. Poetry should touch the hearts and souls of your readers and clearly you do this so well.
With gratitude
Chanti
I would differ in the interpetation of what a modern Haiku is. As many modern Japanese poets write in what could be called a Free Style Haiku. That doesn't use a strict adherence to the traditional format of the poem. In this, they are not limitted to the older 5/7/5 sylables. And in many examples have a running line...
You use of the poem is both refreshing and unique. And is as valid as any Haiku that I have seen. Well done...
Paper laced with ink.
Reflections are hard to catch.
These words are your gift.
You are writing these like short poems, in whole sentences. Haiku is written this way.
Snow-laden cedars
boughs bowing towards earth
Silent sentinels
Look at these again and you will see what I'm saying.
Nice imagery.
Jim Dunlap
Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
Reviewed on December 3, 2004
This is Wonderful Truly Wonderful! A winter wonderland. Dust from Angels' Hands. A desert of snow. just to name two of all of them. YOu done good on this one too. You are good Regis!!!!! : )
The snow is great to me I love it as I grew up in the Wasatch Mts I miss it so Thanks Regis This is really nice and so of the season as the way I remember it to be. But never as untouched as the picture here shows. Beautiful Picture.
Thanks
God Bless You and Your Family
Warmest and Happiest Holidays and all days
Tracey
(Posters sell Posters Afterburn : ) But you're off to a good start there. Proud of you! Love and Peace, the Rebel with a cause) xo
Regis, this poem interchanges so well; molds any way you read it. Mix up the stanzas, it works! This is your genius. A really a mark of a pro.
blessin's,
c.
Regis each one of these is a treasure. I'm saving them to savor again. I love the this thought "Golden stalks of brittle grass,
A harp for the wind" it is divine;-)touched me deeply.Everything has meaning, doesn't it?;-)
I know alot about "angel dust", I have had it lacing my herb in the past...pretty haiku, but you can keep ANY snow you get this winter, up in Canada...Peace by WHATEVER it takes, Ed & Rufuz
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is pure imagist poetry
with no metaphors,
no similes,
no commentary,
nothing imaginary,
and no bs.
It seems easy to write,
but, in fact, it is quite difficult,
and,
even if you 'get' it,
even more difficult to come up with something original.
"The old pond,
A frog jumps in:
Plop!"
- by Basho [translated by Alan Watts]
Very interesting! Keep on writing and sharing Regis and may the Lord send His ministering angel to minster unto you!
Much Love,
Always!!!
Margaret
From a sky of lead
Silver crystals start to fall
Dust from angels' hands
and it looks like this out my window this winter day...
J'aime votre poeme car il n'a pas peur de cette joie sincere qui est preservee dans le coeur toujours ouvert d'un enfant qui est ravie de ce qui il vois.
Merci beaucoup,
Mahdi
*canuck Hugs*
-des
jeanne
Let the snow flakes start to fall.
Peace
Eloquent pic and grand imagery - haiku perfected ... outstanding!!
Best wishes,
Robert
Great imagery in your
Fantsatic writes.
William .....Peace & Love
Peace, Carole
Gina
thank you for sharing.
ann
Another masterpiece
Love and peace
Peter
Yep,Wonder Besets!
Yor Friend,TRASK
such imagery and depth in each line--wonderful presentation! BRAVO!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
thing well, too: 'Is it enough the sun loosening the frost on December windows? I'm tired of tiny noises/the April's cheeping/the vireo's insistence/the prattle of the young no longer pleases.... and so forth.
Each of these Haiku is excellent! You have captured the magic and beauty of our surroundings blanketed in a fresh fallen snow! So serene! I love the way you have strung these Haiku together to create this beauty!
Cynthia
Take care and thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry!!
Love Tinka
All of these are beautiful, and now it makes me long even moreso for our one and only snowfall...
Yes we get snow in Texas..but it usually falls and is gone before the sunsets..or rises,,whichever time of the day or night it falls!
Great work Regis!
Lisa
Each haiku that makes up this collection is beautiful in of its own. I read them more than once and marvelled at your ability to create such wondrous images. I feel like the child with her nose pressed to the window pane, gazing in rapt wonder at a world transformed.
I live in a country where snow is a rarity but remember my years living in Switzerland and the beauty of that landscape draped with winter white.
I can't express my admiration enough. Please don't be put off by your critics. Poetry should touch the hearts and souls of your readers and clearly you do this so well.
With gratitude
Chanti
Reindeer
snow-covered mountains pure white
an avalanche flows
your snow ku's inspired me to write one ...
yours are fantastic free-style haiku
You use of the poem is both refreshing and unique. And is as valid as any Haiku that I have seen. Well done...
Paper laced with ink.
Reflections are hard to catch.
These words are your gift.
Snow-laden cedars
boughs bowing towards earth
Silent sentinels
Look at these again and you will see what I'm saying.
Nice imagery.
Jim Dunlap
The snow is great to me I love it as I grew up in the Wasatch Mts I miss it so Thanks Regis This is really nice and so of the season as the way I remember it to be. But never as untouched as the picture here shows. Beautiful Picture.
Thanks
God Bless You and Your Family
Warmest and Happiest Holidays and all days
Tracey
(Posters sell Posters Afterburn : ) But you're off to a good start there. Proud of you! Love and Peace, the Rebel with a cause) xo
blessin's,
c.
A harp for the wind" it is divine;-)touched me deeply.Everything has meaning, doesn't it?;-)