A Flow Of Consciousness (poem) by Michael D. Schafer on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by Jms Bell

Reviewed on February 8, 2021

A LOT OF INSIGHT AND WISDOM HERE...HOPE SHE FINDS OUT; ONLY GOD IS THE ANSWER. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...HIS+INSPIRATIONS

Reviewed by Mystic Rose

Reviewed on November 2, 2019

The system will never change unless we all change one by one with a leader who knows how to love instead of dogmatically dispensing promises. A great poem Michael. Have a great day.

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on October 31, 2019

"Change the system
Before we all die this way."

Such an apt, timely, and "telling it like it is" write. Well done!

Peace and all good things,

Regis.

Reviewed by E Phillips

Reviewed on October 18, 2019

She certainly has touched base on the issues of the day. And it is better to tell this tale in words rather than in blood, sweat, and tears. It is more than a flow of consciousness, it's also a flow of conscience. Great write!

Reviewed by Susanne Leist

Reviewed on October 16, 2019

It is sad a fourteen-year-old feels this way. We should be ashamed of oursleves and our country.

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on October 16, 2019

I hope it is not as bad for children in school today as your granddaughter writes. There's always been a slice of this going back to the 1950s when I was in grade school and in one room school houses where settlers, newly arrived, set up housekeeping across our great land. But we were not afraid to go to school, and most kids were not afraid to go home for what was happening there, even though we were living in what was considered a "bad" neighborhood.

I think that the media, emphasizing the worst at unheard-of speed, telling us almost instantly what is happening everywhere, all the time, is particularly affecting young people who have not realized that what is offered through the news (perhaps why conservatives call it, fake) is also only a small slice of life in general, that is very good. Your granddaughter has a dark mind and stream of consciousness. Good for advocacy to do something about gun violence and diagnosing and treating mental illness.

Your granddaughter writes scary, but good, stuff. Her novels will become TV shows.

Ron

Reviewed by Ed Matlack

Reviewed on October 16, 2019

WOW, and this young lady is but 14 years old and spouting poetry that should be coming from a philosopher/poet along the vein of Plato! She should keep writing, never stopping no matter what others say, she is a future book writer & I hope that one day I will be around to see that book and read it...-e-

Reviewed by John Herlihy

Reviewed on October 15, 2019

What a great start for such a young person. I was nearly 70 before I wrote my first poem. She has a lot to look forward to.

Reviewed by John Domino

Reviewed on October 15, 2019

I agree with Richard. She has a rare talent!

Trinity Rose is brilliant and she was brought up right! She experienced frighting experiences from the heart of a child while rationalizing the senselessness of it all, just like a good parent. Her ability to express it well on paper is enormous!

Trinity could write a short poetry book today with a title like, "If One Child Could Poetically Change the World, I Could!" or "A Worldly Perspective that Needs to Change. Poetically yours, from Trinity, A Fifth Grader." I'm sure she can think of a better title. I for one, would definitely buy her book!

Well done Trinity!

John Michael Domino

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton

Reviewed on October 14, 2019

Wonderful message from one so young. She has the talent.

Reviewed by Richard Cederberg

Reviewed on October 14, 2019

It's certainly obvious your granddaughter is very aware. I had to read this twice. Her honest heart-rending insights were quite moving. She's a natural. Tell her to keep writing. r

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on October 14, 2019

A look into the reality in how it feels inside a young one's heart. This needs to be made aware of and be read by both the adults and the teenagers. Good parenting means to be able to understand how it feels to be teenagers and see through their eyes.

Sandie