for all the men who showed their strength by wrestling with their own demons, and finding a way to deal with
their own pain, standing by their love-regardless.
Not able
to endure the hardship
of this barrenness, his mind
wants to break
camp,like an early settler
not knowing how
to work the soil,
imagining ripe land
elsewhere.
He knows
she offered up
to the gods flesh
carrying within potential
to nourish the world
sacrificed
on the altar of stainless steel
to the God of Survival.
In the distance
the dawn of his mind
edges up
to the not yet
visible dunes
landscaping his soul.
Faintly sensing the echo
of a Bedouin's love song
for his land.
(From "In the Garden of Illness I sit by the Well of Hope")
The imagery is so condensed and strong. There is a clear vision of what survival is and how a man must learn to accept to lose something in order to keep and nourish love.
Oustanding imagery in closing lines... "Ectomy" is poem written on the platinum page to stand through the millennia showing its glowing letters of poetic excellence.
Thank you Richard, but this is a personal experience only insofar
that I had an ectomy of my own, in my case, my colon.But I wanted to write from the perspective of the person who stands by the loved one,
and explore the dept it takes even for the one going through it
"in"-directly. Due to my own cancer experience I have met many women
who's lifes have been impacted by an ectomy that is visible or enabled
them from procreation,I have written this poem to honor the men who stood by them.
My God ... what an experience. I am so sorry. And the fact that you sing the praises of the man who stood by you, brings tears to my eyes.
You are a noble woman. Thankyou for sharing this powerful piece!
I commend your fortitude and courage ...
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on October 1, 2006
Those last few lines are so beautiful, the title was a mystery, then upon reading this, I was taken away with the words.
Jason Chase, a man filled with personal demons, only wanted to finish his manuscript. But all his carefully laid plans disappear when a stranger showed up at his front door claiming to be his long-lost father.
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The hardest battles are fought within.
Greetings,
Axilea
No, I deny having said that!
Thus, it must be true. Your poetry is great!
Oustanding imagery in closing lines... "Ectomy" is poem written on the platinum page to stand through the millennia showing its glowing letters of poetic excellence.
I salute You, Poet.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Elizabeth
Regis
A good man should always stand by his woman...and vice versa..
Or as my Mum used to say...* Through Thick and Thin "..
Great write
Peter
that I had an ectomy of my own, in my case, my colon.But I wanted to write from the perspective of the person who stands by the loved one,
and explore the dept it takes even for the one going through it
"in"-directly. Due to my own cancer experience I have met many women
who's lifes have been impacted by an ectomy that is visible or enabled
them from procreation,I have written this poem to honor the men who stood by them.
My God ... what an experience. I am so sorry. And the fact that you sing the praises of the man who stood by you, brings tears to my eyes.
You are a noble woman. Thankyou for sharing this powerful piece!
I commend your fortitude and courage ...
Richard Lloyd Cederberg