A comeback poem written after taking a break from poetry.
Oblivion is the calm sea in which we seek;
Inequity is a global lifeboat, where we sway;
So many undercurrents, sweeping us away,
Lost at sea, turbulent is this life, never meek.
The course is hard, unknown these paths ...
Violently rages these stormy places,
Unpredictable are our oceans, seas, mortal races ...
Batten down the hatches, secure these frenzied crafts.
Forever, weeping, melting ... on sandy shores
Powerfully pushes this delirious, grinding mouth,
Perhaps, this chameleon swallows us North and South -
Perishing these tiny specks: mankind - with fluid, ebbing roars.
Never breaks this churning weight and flow,
Savage seas, drowning this savage pain,
Naughty is this voyage home, pours suffering rain ...
Brutally indispensable: a destructive flood, this show.
Destiny is a tragic tide in which ... we wildly ride,
Life is a glacial ocean of criticism ... where we hide,
Time is a dubious finale in which ... we inevitably abide,
Oblivion is mooned course, manipulating our restless tides.
You captured the ebb and flow of life in general and tragedy in particular, Jimmy. There seems to be more opportunity for mayhem than there is for peaceful living. I particularly loved your last line.
This was a beautiful and outstanding poem to come back with, very lovely,
Reindeer
Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
Reviewed on March 2, 2003
A truly extraordinary piece of writing..Ty, Dani
Reviewed by Tien Avielle (Reader)
Reviewed on January 13, 2003
"Destiny is a tragic tide in which ... we wildly ride,
Life is a glacial ocean of criticism ... where we hide,
Time is a dubious finale in which ... we inevitably abide,
Oblivion is mooned course, manipulating our restless tides." - I still find it necessary to struggle against the tide, to fight oblivion. Stunning write.
Hi Shy,
The form expressed here is equally
excellent and serves to carry your message
with that "something" extra special.
Thank you so much for your review of
"Of Pretension and Peace." Very nice to meet you. Vicky
Reviewed by fare good (Reader)
Reviewed on June 26, 2002
This is so powerful my brother words of great love.
Explains the realizations that have given the author the views of living life fully. The life each person dreams about.
You must take a look at yourself before dreams can be reached.
Deciding what is the core of belief.
Explains the realizations that have given the author the views of living life fully. The life each person dreams about.
You must take a look at yourself before dreams can be reached.
Deciding what is the core of belief.
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Too many great lines to single out a favorite...all perfect!
Reindeer
Life is a glacial ocean of criticism ... where we hide,
Time is a dubious finale in which ... we inevitably abide,
Oblivion is mooned course, manipulating our restless tides." - I still find it necessary to struggle against the tide, to fight oblivion. Stunning write.
The form expressed here is equally
excellent and serves to carry your message
with that "something" extra special.
Thank you so much for your review of
"Of Pretension and Peace." Very nice to meet you. Vicky
This is great and I'm with Eileen.
Janet xoxoxoxo
Shy, this is great!!!!! Nice metaphors and great descriptions!!!!!
Oh wouldn't it be wonderful if the sea of life is calm and we enjoy is serenity?????
..... but then again, would there be much fun for the tides that don't have to struggle up the shores?????
Wonderful piece here Shy!!!!! I enjoyed this immensely.
Sandie Angel :o)
Josie