Your choice of rhyme scheme lightens the darkness of the dream to provide a certain balance. Delightful.

Beautiful images and compelling thoughts

wow Amber this is great and the ending line is key,,is it not? wonderful visuals,,,,and I can hear those seagulls call.
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Christine

Very nicely done Amber, I think often we are all like that lost man, seeking the missing pieces of our whole.
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fee

i enjoyed this-

What an awesome picture of loneliness you've painted in this well-written poem! I can just see that poor man sitting there with the world going on around him, but not for him.

EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE YOUR WORDS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Landscape of a dream surrounding a man sitting on a rock as he tries to shake from his memory the picture of a panoramic nightmare of seconds lined up waiting to enter his clock and end his time.

Georg

my goodness, spot-on, Amber and I like the way that you have cleverly shnwn that, although nothing is at is appears, how it DOES appear to us is our very real perception of the truth and that truth can invade our reality - if you get my gist like here, the guy is walking under sunshine but his, as it happens, truth-ful perception that "nothing is as it seems" brings on some very real rain! How I love these kinds of intriguing mirror-writes and ideas.

And the collective consciousness is also fascinating: I wrote a poem yesterday, also playing with ideas of solitude versus loneliness, with some exact-same imagery, like this:

Loneliness is the sudden
clapping of time’s hands,
closing on the strike of twelve:

a draught, a gasp,
a chink, a link,
a blink, a hic, a tic…

that momentary eyelid flicker
when your own soul opens
the door to you –

then drifts away unseen.

Love the commonality of this dream landscape, but also its unique perspectives as seen through the mind and eyes of the solitary one. xx

Thought provoking dream and poem, Amber.