did you get into the yahoo time capsule by chance?
(yes I did)
my goodness I love the way you wrote this poem....
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Vickie

it's eerie, but I have been working on something similar, but your work is prophetic, presumtious (in a good way) and powerful. For me, I see lots of stories within this story.

Cheers,
Dan

What are our grandchildren and great granchildren going to do to live as the absorbitant prices go up and up and things get so bad you cannot walk the streets even in daytime alone. Maybe they will retire to another planet, things cannot be down here on earth as they are going now. Realizing a savior must come soon and straighten out the mess we got ourselves in mostly by crookedness of some.

I enjoyed the flow and cadence of this write...and made me wish that I could do the same...spend my days rewriting time...

Cryssa

Somehow reminds me of the humour of A Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy by Douglas Adams. When the earth is repopulated by hairdressers and advertising hustlers, will it be any better than it is now? Oh for iambi-land and the place of untrammeled trochees... Unique and interesting styling here, Gene. TY Kate xx

Gene, I just enjoyed this so much! Lots of good humor in it.

"to rewrite time
in the whispers of the sea,
echoes of the stars,
the measured rhythm
of a gentle heart that beats
perfect harmony
in iambs and trochees."

Occassionally, another writer will produce something so brilliant and beautiful that it makes me wish I'd written it...this is definitely one of those moments. This is purely exquisite.

I love the poem and I think you have wise grandchildren, though it's a shame to think of how the World may be in a few decades!

"a week’s ration
of scotch"
Now that is confidence oozing. Especially when you're willing to use the booze.

A place of stressed and un-stressed syllables eh? Kinda like that image ... and I like the visionary quality of this Gene.
Richard

Gene,I enjoyed the message in this poeim. "we reject the offer to inherit this earth considering the state of its health." Then I compared that to, "Should my son, in his genetic pursuit,follow my lead, he will surely look ahead to five score and sixteen." The irony between these lines is shocking enough to elicit sardonic laughter. Yes, why are we working so hard to extend life if we are wrecking the planet we live on? Imagine living a thousand years in a cesspool. The scary part is, what if we can't find a way to escape this planet to a better place where we can enjoy the centuries in peace? And if we did manage to escape somewhere prestine, wouldn't we take with us the same lifestyle that wrecked the home planet? The generations following us would probably ruin the next home in time. Look at the damage the Chinese are doing in their rush to copy the American lifestyle so they can eat at Domino's Pizza too.

Lloyd

Your imagination is golden, this piece is pure magic, I wouldn't disinherit the earth, I'd buy it and then choke it with love.

i think youve stolen a page from my soul; disinherit the earth. . .. torn between the loonging to fix it all, save it, HELP SOMEONE HELP! and abandon it......for the sake of aesthetics alone [man.made or God.made].....and whats a life without REAL living? age...means nothing without the heart and soul and passion attached to us. .. the future seems so cold to me.. .
is it just me?
i cant help in this write but to be intrinsically stoic and caught in the [generational] gap of whta we could be and what was. .. . what we throw away, a dixie cup society....used once and discarded.. .our whole earth, our whole humanity, our whole connectedness. ..
argh~~~~ you got me rambling.. . .
making my word voodoo dolls again.
this was stellar.
and stilling.
ness

This is a good example of why I read your writes Gene...You just don't know what your pen will produce...always exciting, always flesh...I'll take you up on your wager if its a bottle of Oban

Brilliant and unique look into what could be, if the planet is still here,which I have doubts about. Love the poem!;-)ET

one of my great great
grandsons or granddaughters
will reject the offer to inherit
the earth, considering the state of its health

And I would bet you'd win your wager, if this unhealthy planet is still here by then.

Imaginative and unique, you take us readers straight into the future.

A powerfully penned look into the future, Gene, well done -

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.