This is very clever and shows the disorder we all have in our lives at times. Wonderful write, Axilea.

I like this poem Axilea. I like disorder and confusion, I like mess....this is nice. But I like many of your other poems as well. I enjoy your writing. Best wishes for the season...S

Hi Axilea! I read your poem "Dysfunctional Poetry". I found it to be one of the best I have ever read. It is written in a style I myself, like. Please check out my poetry at either,www.freewebs.com/kendoo or
here in the "Den".

I read this "Dysfunctional Poetry" better without the first and the last stanzas. They don't add anything to the poem. The second to sixth strophes make it better in every poetic feature and meaning.

In admiration,


Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

Hmm i love the out-look which you have showed in this piece oh and also i like have everything is apart from each other it shopws that the poem is alive almost^^

I think this doesn't say a lot about poetry, but about life. This is written in a manner that demonstrates the chaos in one's life and the choice of living or dieing. I could have gotten it all wrong, but this is what came to mind as I read this amazing poem.

God bless you. Kathy

No apologies and Don't delete, as an exression has no rhyme or reason, write on,,,,,,,and right on. lol
Christine

Great poetry even though a little scattered...I like a neat mess........lol!!

Love Tinka

Interesting critic of your own work but as writers and poets we tend to be our own worst. I think none of your works are in the least dysfunctional on the contrary you know what you are saying and if we grasp that is a bonus, if we read into thems onthing that is not there but helps us than that is a bonus too...write and be true to your muse, that is what poetry is.

Fee

Awwww, but your poetry is wonderful, heartwarming and filled with much truth.....

Be safe,
Karen

Awesome--poor poem! You can take all the words and put them in a towel and toss them up in the air. Let's see where they land--an "and" over here--"drifted" drifted over there. "Semantic" is in the Atlantic, and "proper" never came down. Whatever. A poem's a poem--who cares which way the words lie? (or is it lay?) --Fragmented fancies. Wasn't it Browning who said something to the effect that he only could tell halve truths, and let the readers make up the rest of the story. --Charlie

Dysfunctional I have always been,
Though for a poet its not a sin,
The only thing we all can do is win,
As long as the reader gets from me a grin...(you too)
Ed & rufuz

NO, Axilea,

Never an error to delete. Your poetry SINGS. Mine bites...how I wish I had your poetic ability! Still and all, there's always hope to try again tomorrow. Powerfully stated...well done.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels like that. Fun write with lots of truth behind it.
R~