amputation (poem) by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by serenety L (Reader)

Reviewed on September 29, 2003

So sad Karla !
Nico

Reviewed on September 24, 2003

wow...Karla, this is good, really good...there is little girl hurt but grown woman anger in this piece...and your endline is a perfect closure.
Excellent job, fellow buckeye.

Reviewed by Douglas Arnold (Reader)

Reviewed on September 24, 2003

This poem is a home run. I agree with many things already said above. Particularly being cut off by a parent.I am 49yrs and it still hurts every day. The hardest thing in sport is to hit a round ball with a round bat. The strike has to be millimetre accurate. If amputation were any longer, or shorter I feel it would lose power. As it is it is spot on. I can feel the resentment boiling as I read it.

Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

Oooo Karla I really like this one, so very good indeed you have really captured the emotion the expression so very well!!!!
((((Hugs))))
~Nikki~

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

Oh Karla this is a great work but it saddens me if it is true. I should send it to my father because this is exactly what he did to me. hugs G

Reviewed by Nunya Business

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

I couldn't have said it better myself. I love how you call it a phantom pain. Anybody who has been dumped knows how much it hurts and how impossible it is to locate the source of the ache...

Reviewed by Kevin Mc Crum (Reader)

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

Awesome metaphor. Very well done!

Reviewed by Trixie Love

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

Oh Karla,
I am so sorry that you
feel such pain... :(

Hugs
Trixie

Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*� (Reader)

Reviewed on September 23, 2003

Wow Karla ... this really expresses your pain very well! A+++

~Joseph

Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen