I doubt that you need one more person to tell you. Your poetry is beautiful, romantic, and sensual. Appealing to all of the senses.
Reviewed by Anne Williams (Reader)
Reviewed on March 1, 2006
echoing what others have said...very intense. you wrote in a way that made me feel as if i was there across the fire watching the sparks of the interaction. sometimes you just know a person will be there for you.
This is an intense work of sensory awareness. The five elements, one for each point on the pentacle are present--->air, earth, fire, water, and spirit. The sensations from within are like the stars which only appear when the artificial lights are turned off and the lifeline kiss called upon. This is purely a moment charged with electric chemistry!
Ah...romantic. You do these romance lines well Robert. I think you may have a golden streak of treasure lying somewhere just beneath your skin.
Wonderful write once more! Enjoyed.
Ooooooo... so many lines could cause me to be cheekily naughty after a couple of measures of El Capitan, that's for sure.... But I'll be good and just say that you set a scene that holds the tension well between several moods and trains of thought, trafficking emotion in a heightened state between minds and bodies in close proximity. Sparks fly upwards for certain sure here! :)) And far be it from me to take issue, as you know (!!), but think perhaps the intention might be to finally smother those fears, rather than smolder them, no?! But what the heck if it's done with that lifeline kiss.... Makes me think of your words: "Phuck it... I'm goin in for a swim"... you said it, not me!! :)) Think I'd better go and smother my face with a pillow before Poetry School tomorrow... Seriously, this is tender and full of anticipation, Jude. Gives me warm expectations for my up-coming trip to Margarita!! TY LOL Kate xx
A beautiful scene you set, Jude, with your fire to keep out the cold; a most romantic scene. Is there no end to the romantic moments we can conjure up with beautiful words? I certainly hope not! Well done. Peace. Joyce
This conjured up my two favorite smells, woodsmoke and salt air. Brilliant poem. Romantic, but not blatantly so. There are layers beneath that aren't spoken. To me, a "lifeline" kiss is a perfect description of total committment. Beautiful write, Jude.
The moment is romantic, but I can see a bond being formed too, as you reach out to her and pull her through the darkness to stand in the light created by the merging of two souls. Those who give us “lifeline kisses” are the ones that we remember forever, though often their very knowledge of our vulnerabilities, too quickly, seems to destroy the ability for the relationship to be more than a lifelong friendship. Excellent writing, Jude. This one shines!
Take care,
Sherry
I love this one, there is somthing truly magical and hypnotizing about a man, a woman, a fire and a beach. Perhaps it is some basic longing for warmth and companionship but whatever it is you have trapped the essence of that image in this write. Well done my friend.
I agree with what Peter has said as this is truly a wonderful and romantic poem you have woven with words that only a master poet knows how to weave.
George
Top drawer romantic and impassioned poetry Jude
I reckon one of your very best, amongst an endless and diverse stream of cerebral and inquisitive writes.
Peter
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on February 24, 2006
Very romantic, heart touching write. I would have to say that I enjoyed the first stanza the best as it opened all the possibilities :-)
You've captured such a wonderful romantic moment here..."importing our smiles into each other’s hearts"... and laced with a bit of flirtatious fun..."So you could warm up your hands(And give me a chance to get closer to you)"... Enjoyed this...You go Jude :)!!!
Ron
Like dancing stars superimposed on a crisp and blackened sky
What a wonderful visual in words. I could see the fire's sparks rising into the sky. A million thanks for this wonderful picture.
Bobbi
I too can see that you've captured the
five elements to enhance this work. Excellent!
Sage
Wonderful write once more! Enjoyed.
Lisa
Great work Jude!!
Love Tinka
Take care,
Sherry
Felix
Spectacular romance sizzles!! Excellent!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
George
I reckon one of your very best, amongst an endless and diverse stream of cerebral and inquisitive writes.
Peter
Well done...