Salt air and fish drown the senses.
Blood, tacky touch, theirs and mine combine
without distinction.
The catch is good,
worth more than the investment.
Each day should end the same.
Ninety feet of cement, old, but worthy.
Like a veteran on the field, she knows the game.
Fighting for the end zone, through the breakers.
Tomorrow, like the tide, the rules will change.
You were able to say a lot...in a very short amount of space. I particularly loved the last line. Rules never stay the same do they...just as we think we have them down...they change. :)
Reviewed by Abe Rossi (Reader)
Reviewed on May 25, 2004
Great write....I love the smell of the ocean and the way the sun sets and rises on the ocean....thanx for sharing...Peace Abel
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on May 25, 2004
I could feel fish skin while reading this, great descriptions. I also like the brevity of it.
Lori, I love it when authors step out of the box and reach for the unreachable.
You've done that here, and the end result is awesome!
Enjoyed this. Lisa
Extremely interesting piece, Lori. And very wise; the rules constantly change - in almost any venue.
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on May 24, 2004
Simply excellent.......
Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)
Reviewed on May 24, 2004
Knowledge and diversification is the key, which will unlock many doors for you Poet. And you most definitely have a very bright future ahead of you. Outstanding write.
There is a gutsy and raw strength here, Lori, and I admire your tackling a subject that is not something that may be the first to spring into the female mind!? You have incisively portrayed the mettle of a "girl in a man's world" with this write and given a female edge to the desire and ability to succeed in a very rough, tough area. Many parallels here, I think, but loved the way you have deftly written and captured this maritime mele! Kate xx
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beautifully crafted and impressive!
Love, Sheila
Lori...I could smell the salt water and the fish..
this is brilliant...floria
wow, lori, this one is deep--and brilliantly written--BRAVA!
don't you hate it when the rules change, though (especially when no one informs you until after the fact...sounds like my boss LOL)
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
Nice one, Lori.
Thanks,
Jill
You've done that here, and the end result is awesome!
Enjoyed this. Lisa
~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
Love Tinka
knows fishing,investments, and the law;-)