The Record (poem) by Lori L Moore on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on June 19, 2004

This one brought back vivid memories, I used to compete when I was younger. I love how time stops and lungs burn through out. Well put and written.
Blessings~Shell

Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen

Reviewed on June 11, 2004

I enjoyed this refreshing write, keep up the great work...
God Bless
Michelle~

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Excellent Mental Exercise Every One Should Try Out In Swim Of It all!!

TRASK

Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

great stuff Lori

Reviewed by Kay P Devenish

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

I dived right into this top refreshing poem,took a comfortable swim in it,each lap was enjoyable,I loved the pace but the record still stands,you're still the winner Lori!
Best wishes always
from
your fan
Kay.
p.s
I can really only dog paddle!

Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Outstanding imagery, Poet!!! Excellent job!!! Now do another fifty laps�lol.

Reviewed by M. Brown

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Hi awesome Lori~this is a "cut" above, internally, and oh my, externally! Here I am physically challenged and emotionally postured, braiding my every thought, mustering independence and determination to get to the finish line . . . the finish line of my day, my tiny and sometimes gigantic steps . . . swimming through a strata of commitments, pain, grief . . . swimming through all of the "stuff" that attaches to our daily journey, trying to win at "being there" in the moment, for my family, friends, partners . . . That's what I see and feel and remember when I digest, absorb, and taste your words of enlightment. This is awesome; what a wonderful way of stylizing this subject. Extrapolating, learning something about myself, to lift myself, for me, is the heart of reading. And Lori, you make it so easy and enjoyable, "life analogus to swimming." Pow! Pow! What a challenging and dynamic interpretation. Beautifully illustrated, a brillant use of figurative language. As always.

keep roaming the creative layers of your mind,
marion

Reviewed by Alexander Shaumyan (Reader)

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Great description, Lori. Excellent.

Reviewed by Sue Hess

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

do you swim competition? either way its a great poem

Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

enjoyed
much life here!!!

Reviewed by Dale Clark

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

This is a poem of life and celebration.
Wonderful imagery.

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Congrats on the win, and on the fine poem.

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Clinical precision in this evocative and strong, muscular write, Lori. Loved the imaging from the inside, rather than the outside. My chest feels tight just reading it! Expertly done with no words wasted. Excellent. Thank you. Kate xx

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Enjoyed this workout...lol!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Debashish Haar (Reader)

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

This is so well expressed, YES adrenaline kicks in for win...

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

Reviewed on June 10, 2004

Poetry in motion, so vivid, one could smell the chlorine.

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

cherry nice write Lori. kind of exsausted me though. seems like i've been running, hehe, l&p g

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Nothing better then swimming :-) Wonderful write.

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Supurb write ...Lori
I did some swimming when a young lad
Memories .... Thanks

William

Reviewed by Cynthia Castle (Reader)

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Great images, Dear Poet! ...This one really touched home with me as I was on a competitive swim team for years! ...brought back many great and "burning" memories!

Cynthia

Reviewed by Fletcher Bailey (Reader)

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Lori, excellent poem...it reminds me of my morning dashes in New Zealand to grab the milk whilst running through the frosty grass...although it wasn't so much the burn, but the snow... hehehe...good work poet...Fletcher B

Reviewed by Anniemoh Ohio

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Excellent - having been a competitive swimmer myself, I could feel the burn as I read this.

Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Excellent! Love it when everything comes together like that,

Reindeer

Reviewed by Rebekah Rosie Lang

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Fantastic!

Reviewed by A PAX

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

First prize!!!
what a splash
lol what a rush
ok ok........sorry here........got punnied away

love this......it was real!!! I could see the swimmers!!!
speed...excitement......power
:)
pax A

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

Swimming used to be my favorite activity.
I remember feeling like this! Fantastic write!

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

i wish i did write this poem ;) your imagery is improving with each write ...

Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)

Reviewed on June 9, 2004

What a rush I love swimmer meets and use to be on swim team so the turn home on dime I could feel as your hand rach out and thrust about to
race that parting sea once more.... Excellent visuals was so refreshing JUDE!