I am amazed that we have so much in common. I have a daughter, a lawyer, your age, I was abused when I was young and now suffer from dementia which does not stop me writing.
Keep up the hard work and earn the priviledges in life.
Thanks also for stopping by www.millercaldwell.org and reading Faded Friends.
Best wishes to you
From me here in south west Scotland
Miller
I read an amazing duellism into this finely wrought and emotionally-charged image: if two islands or two oceans come into contact, there will either be a total magnetism or a total repulsion, like the massive fields of energy generated by two powerful forces. Although you speak here of one eroding the strengths of the other, it is interesting that the island one day disappeared - by choice or not?? So, who is the strong one? Sorry, this is a tangent I know, but the "other side of the coin" popped into my head as I read this highly stimulating write. Thank you. PS Emotional control and manipulation: which is worse, the smothering wave or the dripping tap?!! LOL Kate xx
Strong words here succintly penned, how often this happens .... love is meant to be reciprocated, otherwise it will, erode. A superb and honest write Lori.
Lori another unbelivable gem, of the finest quality!
Wow! this one really stuns the senses! Brava!
Reviewed by Fletcher Bailey (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
Lori, this is great. You seem to be able to capture the whole picture with just a few so well and creatively placed verses that open the whole definition up to the reader.
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
Now what do you do?
You get a's in poetry too.......(0:
Gut-wrrenching write! I ache
for you when I read this. He
must have been a special person
to have loved that much. Glad you
can get your feelings out here at
AD, we are your "family" too!
A nimble 'touch' with your words conveys much, and with such an air of quiet desperation, Lori, it is heart wrenching. The reader can feel the loss of self, perpetuated by self. A beautiful piece of artistry.
Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
Lori, I apologize because unfortunately I have been exceptionally busy lately, but I have continued to read your spectacular poetic creations since joining AD. I have enjoyed reading your incredible poetry and learning from your remarkable gifted quill. You do have extraordinary poetic talent, style and grace, and your revealing poetry shall continue to enlighten the masses long after we depart from this world. I know I will carry the celebrated memories of your thought-provoking and well-penned compositions throughout eternity. You continue to exemplify what poetry should do and raise the level of understanding in all who are fortunate enough to visit the sacred shores of your illustrious Den. Sometimes one can easily find themselves overwhelmed with the day-to-day struggles in life, and not be able to give 100 percent. For those of us who are willing to consider ourselves to be human beings, authors and poets we naturally tend to draw off each other’s resourcefulness and influences and continue to forge ahead, alone if necessary. Thank you for sharing your extraordinary work, my poet friend. Take care and be well. Keep The Faith.
Reviewed by Samuel Armstead (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
lori, Erosion is pure truth. I love it, "your rocky boundaries could not withstand" May God Bless You.
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
The end knocking of this one is great!
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
Great imagery. As peter say's both should give 100%; or it's doomed.
On the other hand the east and south country here, is being eroded, by the sea. that houses and farmland is vanishing..
Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2004
Lori, hon, I think all of us poets have had this experience
at least one time in our lives.
Your poem has touched me...again.
Fine work, girl.
Sad but true , Lori...
Key passage "Inch by inch, I claimed your terrain
while giving little of myself. "
If you do not invest in a relationship wholly and honestly...you end up with nothing...
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I found "Erosion" to have been a very powerful message. Keep on writing and continue to share your observation and experience of life.
Manes Pierre
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"Surrounded by my touch,
your rocky boundaries could not withstand
the erosion of my love.
Inch by inch, I claimed your terrain
while giving little of myself.
Until one day, you were gone… "
Everything has an Erosion side.....
Well Done Lori!
Very touching write! Stunning imagery expressing a powerful message! Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent.
Cynthia
I am amazed that we have so much in common. I have a daughter, a lawyer, your age, I was abused when I was young and now suffer from dementia which does not stop me writing.
Keep up the hard work and earn the priviledges in life.
Thanks also for stopping by www.millercaldwell.org and reading Faded Friends.
Best wishes to you
From me here in south west Scotland
Miller
Strong words here succintly penned, how often this happens .... love is meant to be reciprocated, otherwise it will, erode. A superb and honest write Lori.
warm hugs
Elga
Wow! this one really stuns the senses! Brava!
You get a's in poetry too.......(0:
this is outstanding
William ....Peace & Love
Uniquely Different!
TRASK
"Erosion" strikes imagination and creativity.
I salute You, Sublime Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
WOW! poignant and powerful in meaning and descriptions! BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :(
Just what I need to fill another ocean with mt tears!!
Love Tinka
Carmen :-)
for you when I read this. He
must have been a special person
to have loved that much. Glad you
can get your feelings out here at
AD, we are your "family" too!
Excellent poem!
Becca
On the other hand the east and south country here, is being eroded, by the sea. that houses and farmland is vanishing..
at least one time in our lives.
Your poem has touched me...again.
Fine work, girl.
Key passage "Inch by inch, I claimed your terrain
while giving little of myself. "
If you do not invest in a relationship wholly and honestly...you end up with nothing...
Peter