Rain falls, still, again, it seems continuously.
The phone never rings. It listens to the rain.
The patio furniture is saturated. It should have been covered days ago. Neglect is such an easy alternative. Especially,
in the rain. Following too closely, my thoughts rear-end one another. Another mental collision. A common occurrence when I think of you.
When you were here, skies were not blue, but the hue didn’t seem to matter. You were never more than a small answer to a large question… a small cloud among the gray.
Lori, I just discovered you and I really like your work. I was plagued with genetic depression, PTS, and abuse. But I am so much better now. I enjoyed reading your bio.
Not only rain but a dreary, deadening fog as well hangs about in gloom, along with the engulfing puddles and pools. This is quite superb, Lori, in its ambling prose format as well as the language which repeats like continuous rain falling. Love the self-questioning in this - can so relate: "My little black thunder cloud just follows me around... perhaps it has something to do with me?!" Brilliant - am keeping. Thank you. Kate xx
Sad and regretful composition , Lori
A cryptic message laced with self doubt seems to hang in the moist
air....
Its always best to confront uncomfortable situations with faith and hope...
Love
Peter
Reviewed by D May (Reader)
Reviewed on September 22, 2004
Lori, I loved this title and the poem is fantastic. You have said so much here and this piece was deeply felt. I love rain poems.
superb rendition so explicit so controlled so distanced to put your own mood right back into context in its expression i suppose theres a lot more could be said about your style & the way it works in your writing
but it still makes fine reading saludos
This book represents a thirty-day period of my poetry journal. Each poem addresses
the dominant thoughts occupying my mind during the early morning hours of a given
day.
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
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being together in person?
you always please with your writes.........(0 :
Becca
Reindeer
Have to blame someone I guess
Love This write
illiam ....Peace & Love
A cryptic message laced with self doubt seems to hang in the moist
air....
Its always best to confront uncomfortable situations with faith and hope...
Love
Peter
Try IT: Then May Just be Rain Will Wash Your Brain & You'll Even Have Some Inexpensive Brain Ran In Rain Fun!
TRASK
a powerful, poignant write--well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :(
This sure is melanconic. But superbly does the depths of you pain, hit the reader..
This is a great line...hope you felt better after writing it???
Safi,
but it still makes fine reading saludos
Love Tinka
Carmen :-)