Mother Goose Belief (poem) by Lori L Moore on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by A Serviceable Villain

Reviewed on February 9, 2004

Thoroughly enjoyed - all 'prose', no con!

Reviewed by Melissa Rives

Reviewed on February 8, 2004

I agree with the others, this is fantastic in every way. :)

Reviewed by Trixie Love

Reviewed on February 7, 2004

Outstanding write, Lori...

Simply beautiful!!!

Trixie :)

Reviewed by jeanne watson

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Really like it Lori.....very touching....well penned .... and love the title...
jeanne

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Sad but very true and many can relate to this I am sure. Thank you for this offering, Lori. Love and peace. Regis

Reviewed by Daniel McTaggart

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Listen to William, Lori. I don't think this needs to be changed a bit. A lot of first drafts are fine the way they are. And this is one of them. Keep it the way it is. It's very good.

Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Lori this is so nice..I always like the first write...seems fresher....nice work..floria

Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Loved this write of yours....BHUWAN

Reviewed by William DeVault

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Can only speak for myself, but this is good as it is, and revision will merely tamper with the integrity of your emotions and the moment. stet is my best advice. lovely, lovely work.

Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Ah Lori, this was outstanding, deeply moving poem, loved this,

Reindeer

Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster

Reviewed on February 6, 2004

Lori, this is an exceptional write. Beautiful.

Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Damn I am glad you are writing. Thanks.

Reviewed by Marilyn Seray

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Awww, Lori, I know just what you mean by the "Mother Goose belief" I love this and I still believe

Reviewed by ♥ Kari Hirshey ♥ (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Wonderful verse! I enjoyed this read a ton! THanks so much for sharing... I always enjoy!
~Kari Anne~

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Wow, you can really write.....

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

As with all of your work Lori, I think it's exceptional! You always manage to stir my emotions with your decisive, excellent choice of words!

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Mother Goose, what did she know, I have it on good authority that she did the nasty with ALL of the Three Little Pigs, the tramp. LOL Loved this sad, touching poem. Seems as if I will have to track you also.

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

Really like this poem; draft or otherwise.

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

So sad and beautifully written!

Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)

Reviewed on February 5, 2004

i like this. especially the title.

hint on revising: put it away for a week and done think about it. then go through each line, each WORD, and ask yourself if it's doing its job.

remember: in poetry there's no room for filler.