New to Haiku and need your help. On the wrong track, let me know! Mighta had too much fun writing these. Sometimes it's a good sign, but often it means I've wandered to the far side of La La Land...again.
T h a n k s, guyz!
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blue chameleon
objects with a skeleton
living room light
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daylilies open
orange yellow faces sun
one by one by one
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Yorkshire Terriers
all spunk muscle appetite
listen to long-hair
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heart leafing redbud
pink lavenders a spring noon
catching human breath
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hummingbird feeder
jets rubies to June sky
Bingo tiny birds chirp
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Carolina wrens
furnish fire painted mailbox
igniting twigs with life
you are on the right track
see my article, " my Poetics [#2]"
it's about haiku -- best part about the article, [besides the fact that i wrote it (((grin)))], is the collection of really hreat web sites.
imho #2 is the best, and #1, doesnt work, for me.
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if you are going for 5-7-5
a few of them are off
~Nikki~
Senryu 575 emotions.
Well done. A couple need an extra syllable, but you did well. Bravo.
see my article, " my Poetics [#2]"
it's about haiku -- best part about the article, [besides the fact that i wrote it (((grin)))], is the collection of really hreat web sites.
imho #2 is the best, and #1, doesnt work, for me.
over all a good write
john+