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The Legend of Ol' Meatball (Sherry's Challenge)
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This is the second and final answer to my own challenge. I used the bulk of the words in a short story that I posted yesterday in the stories section here in AD. This is a poem in which I used the rest of them. A bit of a stretch, but I DID IT!! Hooray!

The Legend of Ol’ Meatball The ghost of “Meatball” rides tonight After his fiery death in a freeway fright His motorcycle, shiny red His body missing half his head Dressed in full leathers, hair pulled back This bad boy hails from the devil’s pack His gang name sewn onto his jacket “The Spider Bites” above the placket And on the back a nasty spider A scary sight to another rider As he flies down hilly roads at night Like a roller coaster taking flight Not a handsome man, as his name suggests Skull and crossbones on his chest He has one black eye and the other glass Hair pulled back in a bow tied mass He wears a belt made of pop-tops From the beers he drank while dodging cops A face that appears to have emerged one night As the loser in a bad cockfight A drummer’s what he was by trade Wears eyeglasses tinted in sun glass shades His mighty bike wears proud her name “Old Rim Shot” sits in Harley fame He wears black boots, up to his knees When he walks the old thick soles release Sparks from tap dance metal toes He lights his smokes from the sides of those His wristwatch “snaps, crackles and pops” Bought with all his saved box tops And around his neck a heavy chain In the center sits the word “Insane” He rides hard and he rides real fast Leaves those he passes quite aghast As he bounds the hills with speed of light His stomach flip-flops in delight If you look into his saddle bags You might find things like “dirty mags” You’d find a checkbook and be surprised To find a teddy with the big brown eyes Though rough and tough on the outside Ol’ Meatball was a lamb inside He gathered toys for kids in need And the hungry, he’d always stop to feed So though he rode into the sunset And his fiery fate he finally met His spirit’s still held in high regard By those who ride as fast and hard Now on his bike his ghost still rides Keeping watch by his brothers sides He rides to keep them safe from harm And to keep the memory of "Old Rim Shot" warm Sherry Gail Heim October 22, 2004 Copyright © Sherry Gail Heim 2004

Reviewed by m j hollingshead

Reviewed on February 10, 2005

enjoyed the read

Reviewed by Jack Roberts

Reviewed on October 28, 2004

Wow!! I know I am behind here but I may have to try this challenge!! Looks like it may be too hard for me lol Well done Sherry!

Jack

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on October 24, 2004

This poem approaches epic. Ol'Meatball appears to be so real that he reminds me of bikers I've known. So if I'm out on ride one cool, autumn night and feel the hot breath of Rim Shot on my neck like a bright light. I'll know it's just Ol' Meatball out for a blast and cool my heels to make the ghost of his memory last. Coors.

Ron

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on October 23, 2004

An outstanding write Sherry

William ....peace

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Impressive disciplined write, Sherry. Great job. Love and peace to you. Regis

Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)

Oh, my god... Sherry, if I had a dime for every goosebump this gave me, I'd buy out AD and make you QUEEN! Hmmm... how can I say this? Ok, when we read many things in one sitting, it can seem daunting to come to a really long poem... NOT THIS TIME! You could have gone on and on and on and I would have been rapt. Oh, yes, the story itself is completely engrossing... even further, for me, was the sound of it in my head... the rhyme, the rhythm, infectious, absolutely mesmerizing. I quite left the room, climbed right into the poem and rode like the wind! I'm not only keeping this for my library, I'm going to read it again and again. It's a very creative writer who can bring you so close to the subject that when it ends, there is a moment, even longer, of grief, of loss. You've collapsed me. sigh... I love this piece! katy xox.

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Your challenge has certainly captured the collective AD imagination, Sherry! Each response I have read is full of energy and joie de vivre and has certainly struck a chord deep in our "wild-side" subconscious. What is particularly striking is that everyone has majored in some shape or form on the "lovableness" of these "Meatballs", which just goes to show that perhaps lurking not too far beneath the skin of the poet, there is a Hell's Angel waiting to see an old lady across the road somewhere... and, conversely, that perhaps some of the greatest poets "out there" are screaming around terrorising the neighbourhood in black leathers!! Cool challenge, Sherry, thank you. Kate xx

Reviewed by Leland Waldrip

Reviewed on October 22, 2004

Words and music -- an energy treat. Good job, Sherry!
Best regards,
Leland

Reviewed by jude forese

really awesome! you can never tell by one's veneer what really goes on within one's heart ... your descriptive images are fantastic ...

Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU

This is sounding, soulful and beautiful... An outstanding composition.

Thank You.

Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Excellent Sherry!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

(((sherry)))

an exceptional write--RIDE ON!!!!!!!!!!!

(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)

Reviewed by Lori Moore

Excellent write, Sherry!

Reviewed by Sue Hess

i love this...i think i dated him!

Reviewed by Dawn Richerson

this is FANTASTIC, Sherry. i love it! Dawn

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Sherry, this is a classic.and no one will surpass this beauty! WOW!!!
I'll read the story now, glad you mentioned it! This is utterly fantastic!Kudo's!

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)

You have to be smart and patient to do this! Good job Sherry, thanks for the laugh.

Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope)

Wonderful write, Sherry. This is a great challenge to all poets.

Reviewed by Michelle Mills

Ol' Meatball??????????? Oh, I have to go to the bathroom before all this laughing makes me disgrace myself! This is one of the funniest poems I've ever read!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Michelle

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

I love your legend of Ol' Meatball and his Teddy Bear, Sherry. You have surpassed your own challenge with this poem!