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Love Gone Awry
by A Serviceable Villain → (All Poetry by A Serviceable Villain)
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'Cast in Bronze'


Poem Artwork

Met on a blind-date through

a mutual friend; he actually saw

her through a cracked-view, but

still admired her outward beauty.

 

Love immediately fell into place

She moved in with him – sold all

that she had; not to mention her

money was now in his bank account.

 

She also gave up her career and

401k – no more fidelity, but rather

infidelity on his part, like to drop

his pants when the babes flirted.

 

And then his dominating ways

began to surface like a person

who drowned, and then floated-up

all mildewed and smelling musty.

 

Got so incredibly bad she was

even afraid of her own shadow

That is to say whenever there was

one around – kept her locked-up.

 

He abided by the adage of ‘Should

be seen [sometimes] and not heard’

She asked him one day, “What do

you do for a living?”  Had never told her.

 

“Oh, if you must ask – I’m a bronze

sculptor;”  “And to make-up for all my

nastiness, I want to make a bronze

statue of you my betrothed!”

 

“Please, come with me to my workshop”

She reluctantly followed; “Here, through

this narrow door;”  Walked right into his

deliberate trap – she heard the door lock.

 

His wife was in the mold; then came the hot

wax – filled every pore of her skin; she could

no longer breathe, could no longer scream

All the life in her was snuffed out in an instant.

 

After the bronze-casting, placed her on the

front lawn – all passer-bys commented, “My,

what a lovely statue, so lifelike!”  Told law

enforcement agents she died overseas.

 

One night, he looked out and the statue was

gone; then heard a loud creaking noise coming

up the stairs; it was her, all bronzed; shoved him

out the 2nd story window; “Consider this a divorce!”

 

‘2009’ RLS


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 Reviews of "Love Gone Awry"
Reviewed on February 25, 2009
Hello Robert,

A great story of revenge and restitution, was there a truck coming down the street that ran over him? (Sadistic!) Loved it, sheer suspense and emotion-filled all the way.

Cynthia

Reviewed by Mr. Ed
Reviewed on February 19, 2009
Your tales are always eerie, and your endings are always Marvelous!

Reviewed by Liana Margiva
Reviewed on February 19, 2009
WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle
Reviewed on February 19, 2009
This is absolutely fantastic.You are great at storytelling.The man deserved what he got.I enjoy reading it,take care

Edwin

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
This Is Wild...Keep Em Come...

Read My Poem Today Of My Blind Date...

TRASK

Reviewed by Christine Alwin
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
omg Lance...you are going to keep me up all night now...wow ....what a story!
love,
Christine

Reviewed by John Flanagan
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
Lance,
Many forces at play here, a common reality blended with a strange idealization, shadows and suggestions of Pygmalion/Eliza Doolittle and Professor Higgins...I like the basic theme and how you develop it and where the poem goes. Highly creative and imaginative.
John

Reviewed by 000 000 (Reader)
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
Another tale from ..The twilight zone. Lance, you really have the imagination and your endings are truly surprising! I believed this was going to be a love story, then the tables turned to Murder. Your writings only get better!
Love and sunshine, CarolHawks

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
Oh wow!!! I guess he deserved to be shoved out of the window into the street. Heeehee!!!

Wonderful tale, Lance!!!

Okay...now you've got my story bones going. Now all thoughts are coming into my head, and my head is now once again filled with all kinds of stories.

Perhaps I should begin to post the old ones first. I need to tone them up before I post.

Great job with the storytelling!!! Can you do your own storytelling show?

Sandie Angel :o)

Reviewed on February 18, 2009
Oh, my, Lance, you did it again! Wrote a compelling thriller with an unexpected twist. Well done!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
THis is telling of a love gone Stagnant!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Phyllis Jean Green
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
What a great story! What a great talespinner you are!! B r a v o !!
xOx 'Pea' xOx

Reviewed by J'nia Fowler
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
Love the lost wax process analogous to the lost wife process. Very clever and fun to read. I always look forward to the snappy endings of your poems. Hugs and chuckles, J'nia

Reviewed by Joanna Leone
Reviewed on February 18, 2009
There are many important messages in the poem. A woman must never give up her life completely when she becomes involved with a man, especially placing her money into his account. My guess is that she was so blinded by him and being in love with him that she trusted him with her money. Also, there are many men ( and women, too ) who are not really over their ex wives or former girlfriend. The new woman in the man's life sometimes starts to feel "second best" as some men "worship" or continue to keep the memory of their ex lovers' alive, even when they are involved in a new relationship. Poetry means different things to different people, but in my opinion, creating a bronze statue of his former love signifies what many of us fear in a relationship today. Sometimes we get involved with someone who never let go of their former love, and we are expected to fill "the mold" of the past love.

The next part of the poem surprised me as you mentioned he told officials that his former love had died overseas. This added a suprise twist in the poem.

Well written, imaginative, and you were able to pull me into the poem.

Excellent work, as usual!


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