Oh My, this reminds me of a mermaid!

An emotional poem here that surely connects with the readers. I am not sure about why you chose to place certain words at the end of the line rather than start a new line with them. For example, why do you end the fourth line with the word "where" instead of starting the next line with that word? Wondering the same with the phrase "my spirit" and there a few others. Any particular reason. I wouldn't change the content of this piece but I'd reformat it...that is move some words at the end of lines to beginning of the next line...

Love the hand reaching out and the taking of it in the end. . .glad you had a friend.

WOW...OUR LIVES ARE SO PRECIOUS...TO TRUST THE PEACE OF IT TO ANYONE OR ANYTHING BUT GOD, IS NOT A WISE THING AND USUALLY REGRETTED...I KNOW, BECAUSE...I'VE BEEN THERE. GLAD THIS WAS SOME YEARS AGO. A TERRIFIC WORK OF DEEP, WRENCHING EMOTIONAL TORMENT. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS. LOVE, JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS

Regis,
So sad ,but very well written as usual.
Nicole

Such raw emotion in this poem, Regis. Love and Hugs,
Sheila

lovely work

Good Morning Regis,
I Loved Your Poetic Express Of Need.
There Is No More Prevalent Love In The World Than Giving Of Ourself To Another. It is the foundation of strength to acknowledge our need & also to ask for our need and give of ourself. No matter to a friend or someone we have never met.
I give eye contact to everyone I see & I say hello and treat strangers as if I know them. It is important to me to do this because I don't know if they feel like ending their life & perhaps I can make a difference by acknowledging them in myself. We never know what impact we have on others & Know this Regis, I Love You Dearly My Friend!
I Embrace You Always With My Heart & Outstretching Of My Soul Through The Hands Of Time
Love & Hugs
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Vickie

DEEP, BEAUTIFUL WORDS, VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Thank goodness we have people to save us in those needed times. Because people need people especially when rejection comes in to play by others which can be very devastating. Wonderful, emotional write.

Reg,
I was rushed along in the waters current. Your words pulled me under a few times and I had to catch my breath. I appreciate your mastery...
Best wishes and be safe,
Chris

Regis, I can so well relate to this write. That outstretched hand of friendship and hole can make all the difference! I enjoyed this very much! ~Butch

I like this one very much, so very true as none of us are the islands we may sometimes fancy ourselves to be

I am really glad that she held your hand for you are still here on the Den with us all.

A familiar dream -- enjoyed the read. R

A well-written and touching poem. How I wish more people would save their drowning friends and not just sit there and watch it happen.

Loved this breathtaking dive into extraordinary beauty, sobering compassion, and healing friendship.
Aberjhani

Regis, always a pleasure to read you.

Well done.

This so beautiful, and I agree too that this IS priceless and a gem keeper. I only wish someone would hold their hand out to me so I stop sinking. Thanks for sharing Regis.

May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your little sister, Barbie

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

Awesome write, my friend.
As William say's this is priceless.
You have amazing talent!

~Linda

An awesome write Regis
this piece is priceless
A gem a keeper
thanks for shring

Peace
William

You have beautifully expressed the way one feels if left alone. Loved it!
Love and Peace,

B&R

Regis,

I am honored to stop by and read this; what a beautiful write! Very well done; bravo!

(((HUGS))) and much love, ton ami, Karen Lynn. :D

Wonderful prose and very special and symbolic meanings here. I've always believed that we cannot exist wholely without a significant partner (whether spouse, loved one, soulmate, etc.). We need to trust, love, compliment, help, and "hold hands." Thanks for sharing. My best, Gloria

Plaintive tale of deep sorrow and seeking a lifeline to be through from the one responsible for his perdiment, annd at last, the prayer was answered. This is a very good "meaningful" dream you have here.

Been there < done that ultimately learned to swim

good write

john+

It's amazing, dear Regis, what the right words, and an extended and loving hand can do for another. we are so inter-connected and dependant on one another, is so many unfathomable ways.

You have captured a bitter/sweet poignacy in this evocative (for me) write. I am sure that most have been in this uncomfortable place before in their lives at least once.

Thankyou for sharing this "real" write ...

Benisons
Richard Lloyd Cederberg

True friendship is a rare and precious thing. If one wants a true friend, one should "be" a true friend. Blessed are those that have such! Well done, Regis!

This shows a sadness, and it is true, there are those we know in our hearts that life would not be right without-it is hard, that abandonment feeling, something I have fought for years (thanks, Dad, lol), but I now turn to my faith when I feel the waters rising and try hard to stay afloat-writing-wise, this was a good form, felt like a rolling sea of words and gave a real effect of drowning in need. Love & Peace, Michelle

This is a beautiful characterization of love. What man has ever loved a women who did not feel like he was drowning from it. Ill spoken words, disagreements and sometimes plain anger. The funny thing is that it all is caused by love. The same love the causes both to embrace one another and utter, "I'm sorry." I felt all this as I read. Great piece.
God Bless,
LEw

A very touching poem, Regis. ~~Nordette

your SOS was definitely answered ... lucky man ... not all can find friends who'll stick their necks out to save you ...

How is it, too, that we would risk the drowning if it meant the reassurance of being rescued by that one significant gesture of the hand and heart as well... forget anyone else's lifeline!! :)) You pull us into this one like a riptide, Regis and we are just soooooooooo glad that you are still afloat! Hopefully, like driftwood, you might just go with the flow and end up on the shores of that desert island built for two.... Love on the line here... and reeled in beautifully. A make-or-break write. Love the sustained metaphor. Bless you, Kate xx

Regis, such touching expression of human need...

Gina

Very touching and profound work here. Thank you for sharing your poetic talent with us.

This poem has passionate heart. Your words touch deeply and enlightened my soul.

Reg, It was beautiful and sad at the same time. Love has many meanings, its joy and pain to name a few.

Doesn't life often seem to drag us along with its current like that. Its a great thing to have someone who will throw us a rope to hang onto.

Ah Regis, how deeply this touched my heart, such powerful imagery, beautifully written,

Reindeer

Being a former Lifeguard, I should get on you about
all the rules of swimming you broke, but then. . . . . .
You weren't in water at all.
Excellent poem Reg
DWB

Aaaaawwwww!!!!! Here's my hand to pull you out of the water now....

Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)

I'm sure glad it was only a dream, Regis...though dreams can sometimes feel so real. A kind word spoke with love will turn the tide for a "drowning" soul. A meaningful poem...!

God bless
Lena

Your softness of heart screams out in this great piece!

It's a noble poem. Cheers. :-)

Teaches us never to second guess ones intentions. Very solar (enlightening) Bro. Regis.
blessin's
cynth'ya

Regis, I think you may speak for many with this stunning write. You have expressed the torment of losing control of feelings so powerfully well - lovely to read a happy ending here. Love Panda :)

A powerful write, Regis! I can relate well. We must be sure to reach out hand when someone needs it, too. (-: Excellent!

Peace. Joyce

Good to have someone, though at times I feel I don't need anyone, as growing up, for the most part alone, I have learned...e & r

I love this poem Regis it offers so much well expressed emotions.... The ending perfection Peace and Love
Joselyn

Deeply touching , deeply moving. I'm speechless, my friend Regis

A gripping poem ! Many of us get lost in the river of life while trying to survive. We reach out needing the safety net which only that one special person can give. Love can be filled with pain and rapture. Hang on tight, but tread water carefully.......M

Indeed we do. That's why we lost a rib. A house, car, son, bank balance,lol But when we do find that one.Hold on tight to her hand....

Glad you are still here, Regis.
Peace,
Carolyn

Regis,
You trusted that she would be faithful;
That's the core of the dream from my view.
And hurray for her! She came through for you.

Great, unique poem!
Connie

this is a very sad work...it is difficult to follow with no punctuation, all the words running together...
yet it makes me "feel" as though i am struggling to breathe, like i am drowning!!!

ann

Superb metaphor in this gripping poem. I think you touch us all since most of us have felt the drowning sensation at one time or another. Thank God for the saving hand, because some never receive it, and that's the real misery...Excellent work Reg! You have lots of friends, hope you never have to feel alone!

With Affection
Eileen

Peotry can be highly personal or reach the masses individually, each having found a part of themselves in the poet's own words. I think you reach out to everyone who has ever suffered a confusing loss of love.
"and left behind I felt I’d fallen
into this river of abandonment
neglect and rejection where
the current was powerful my spirit
was beaten..."
How perfectly you've captured the emotion and the quest for unanswered questions until she reaches out in friendshp and the potential of hope returns to renew.
I even enjoyed reading this outloud and listening, Reg...
xo Taylor~

I don't think I've ever read a bad "Auf le Prof" poem Reg, but I'm staggered by the sorrow and pain just pours from this piece. Just when I think I've read your best, you raise the bar for all of us here at AD to aspire to...Amazing work. I normally don't like lack of punctuation in any piece as it usually makes it hard for the reader to follow, but because the emotion floods through this, it seems a very fitting way to present the piece. Wonderful. Love, Michelle

I love the positive ending of this piece.. well done!

Myrna

Romantic You,i.e. You Must Learn To Be Alone...

All Your Just Rewards Are Not In Or Of This Physical World...

TRASK

This took us full circle... the hopelessness and despair to one of great hope and joy! You are still here, and everyone needs a helping hand every now and again. I loved it - thank you for sharing!

RM Green

she held out her hand and I’m still here

Glad to hear that, Regis!

I love this happy ending, Regis! May all your dreams and realities end happily!

Susan

This must have been a nightmare albeit it has a positive ending. A helping hand is always needed and I do expect such from my wife as much as she expects me to give her mine. It would be horrible if we did not go through life hand in hand. Lovely drea poem, Regis. Victor

Dreams can save the day...well done Regis!!

You may not be a good swimmer but you are a surviver my friend!!

Love TinkaSweets

In good times or bad, I think a hand held out to us is reassuring; whether it be that of a friend, family, or of God. Great expressions of love, lonliness and life. Good work with words, Regis.

Micke

Christ finally pulled me out of an enduring river of misery, failure and aimless drifting. Other entities had tried some valiantly but i just fell back in.
You're on dry land, it is on land we are faced with different challenges. May your friend be eve present with her outstretched hand to help you. Thanks for sharing your experience. Apt metaphor

Only a dream.......
thank goodness.......pax A

You very adequately showed despair...then hope. Excellent.

I'm sure glad she held out her hand, Reg! We don't want to lose you.
Very interesting poem - I especially enjoy the lines,
"... I was beaten and battered against
boulders of hurt and pain ..."
Excellent lines, Reg!
Many hugs,
CJ

I know this sinking/drowning feeling all too well, it is a great risk that we take when we leave a relationship hoping someone will toss us that lifeline or a hand to put us back on stable ground again. Great comparison my friend.

Fee

And praise God for it, Reg.. you are NEVER alone, Brother!

This is an excellent depiction, of the angst of a soul, in need of another, and further proof, that we were not created to be alone...[Ephesians 2:19] Outstanding write, Regis!

Love, Rhonda

The corncob bobber keeps us afloat when a friend throws out the liter and reels us in to the grassy banks of friendship where the faery's feed us inspiration and color the poisonous mushrooms with flaming reds and blues with white spots so we know which friends are poison and which friends are trusted...Sage is a trusted friend to Regis and Regis has held his hand out to me many times...thank you, Reg...

Sage

She was The Blessed Virgin Mary and she has a message for you. Can you figgure it out? Marguerite

Oh, my, Regis,

This is powerful writing; one feels the terror and uncertainty of life, and then the wonderful ending. She threw you a life preserver, and here you are! Good thing, too.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reg

I am glad that you are still floating..
Steve's advice is sound to me as well..

Peter

That's one beautiful poem with a happy ending.