you are thick
with attraction,
the pull that
is acting
like magnets
keeps stacking
itself
in my head..
or my gut
or my heart,
no, it's lust, and a part
of being around
someone who is
like you..
lucky me blues..
the view that is subject
to me
in your person
is subtley sneaking in
fantasy versions
that make themselves known
by the shift in my hue
as I turn bright red,
thus,
those lucky me blues...
but it's fun talking to you
and working beside you
and so I
am lucky
to know you,
I'll get through
this unexpected distraction
that is you,
and I'll be just fine
with my
lucky me blues...
(how about you?)
copyright 2007 Rose Loya
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Reviewed by Butch Howard (Reader)
Reviewed on July 17, 2007
Lust is recognized for what it is (or is it something more?) and conveyed well in this piece. I also like the question at the end. Well done!
~Butch Howard
Rose....this made me smile real big...that last line is a masterstroke...it adds a completely different meaning....a somewhat coy question that leads one to wonder...if the object of the authors lust says the right thing, will she submit?
Excellent work, Rose!
How creative, thanks for sharing your talent, there is no doubt in my mind that you are the end of someones rainbow. If you get time check out my poem "My Rainbow's End"
Hi Rose - lucky me blues - what a great bittersweet blues line - sweet and wry - liked how the rhyme and rhythm holds this together, song-like in places - enjoyed, Nicky x
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~Butch Howard
Excellent work, Rose!
God Bless You and Your Loved Ones
Fee
Thanks,
Dan