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Adventures in commuting
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Just my luck


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The vortex rotated slowly

Dark and churning

Boiling like an evil stew

 

Descending ever downward

As if pointing directions

Straight to the devil’s lair

 

Thousands of lives caught

In the swirling black chaos

Dancing like a plague of raging locusts

 

Debris spatters off the windshield

I curse the day

Stuck once again

Smothering in the fumes

Behind a greyhound bus

 

 

Copyright 2009  Patrick A Granfors

 

 


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Reviewed by Regis Auffray
Reviewed on August 30, 2009
I truly feel sorry for those who have to commute every day to and from work. I know some people who spend three hours of their day at it. You have conveyed the theme very effectively here via your verses, Patrick. Love and peace,

Regis

Reviewed by Axilea MU
Reviewed on August 23, 2009
Expressive visions of inferno!
It's out there, in the street.

Axilea

Reviewed on August 23, 2009
LOL! Good one, Patrick! And here I thought you were writing about Storm. Wasn't the black clouds I was thinking of - well done!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Mr. Ed
Reviewed on August 23, 2009
Those fumes are deadly, indeed!

Reviewed by Lori Moore
Reviewed on August 22, 2009
Love your creativity. I hate the smell of diesel.

Reviewed on August 22, 2009
You had me for a second there; thought you were writing about a tornado; nope! Greyhound bus! LOL Too funny; well done, Patrick; loved it!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. ;D

Reviewed by Jms Bell
Reviewed on August 22, 2009
I IMAGINE THAT THE VIRTUE OF 'PATIENCE' MUST BE CALLED UPON GREATLY IN A SITUATION LIKE THIS, WHICH YOU HAVE DEPICTED SO VIVIDLY WITH GOOD IMAGERY. ENJOYED. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS.
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS

Reviewed on August 22, 2009
At least it wasn't a school bus that stops every 60 feet
Have a great one
The Buzzard


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