I can smell the wind coming from the ocean And waves tumbling turning red As the sun goes down in the west Our love has gone away with it Your words were bitter like almond bread Your eyes betrayed me With your last kiss Your love was already dead And my love taken away from me Like a dark coat Loneliness comes my way Covers me up in sorrow Between scattered glass Covering me up with darker thoughts Until the flickering of the flame goes out And only leaves behind the ashes I am telling my story to the ocean and sand And it washed away by the current And brushed ashore into my face And I wish it would go away To another world to see And I want to turn my back And try and walk away But where there was pain in my body There is only emptiness to hide away And I wish I could lose this heart Or exchange it for another Loneliness covers me up In that dark coat of sorrow I will wait till tomorrow For you to come back
You've captured sadness and lonely so well in all you've said Tinka, here's hoping that love and happiness washes back to you to kiss your face..........Well done!
Salt tears must mingle with the oceans salt water to give your poems the magic that you always have their. The heartache, the longing and the quiet hope that maybe some day life as you knew it will return. YOu capture these feelings and share them with your readers honestly and openly and we feel your feelings and long to take the pain away.
Great job as always Tink.
Felix
PS...Sorry I havn't been able to catch up lately due to new job and health issues been either working, sleeping or struggling to keep up with the reviews and not give up on writing the odd poem myself. THink of you often though. Fee
Times like these demand a complete change of scene, Tinka! Get your sorry ass on the next trans-oceanic flight outta town and forget about this lout...
Superbly penned emotional capture.
Peace and Blessings,
Carolyn
the ocean holds so many secrets, and i truly think that the storms it tosses ashore is because it wants to cleans itself of sorrow and leave all the secrets ashore
very nice poem, Tinka
Reviewed by Only A Poet (Reader)
Reviewed on January 9, 2006
a compelling and emotional write Lady Tinka.
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on January 9, 2006
And ye must wait, yet again. Drat. Pretty nice stuff here, Tink.
Gosh, I could feel every line of this. I've felt that way for some time now, since my Dad died. Sometimes I think I wear sadness the way you described..."In a dark coat of sorrow". This is an outstanding write Tinka. Brava!! Michelle
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Great job as always Tink.
Felix
PS...Sorry I havn't been able to catch up lately due to new job and health issues been either working, sleeping or struggling to keep up with the reviews and not give up on writing the odd poem myself. THink of you often though. Fee
Superbly penned emotional capture.
Peace and Blessings,
Carolyn
Carole
very nice poem, Tinka
I would ditch this rogue !
Very sad and emotive write
Peter