Sojourn On Mars The Conclusion (poem) by Peter Paton on AuthorsDen

Sojourn On Mars The Conclusion
by Peter Paton → (All Poetry by Peter Paton)
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Martian Volcanoes Fires that shook me once, but now to silent ashes fall'n away. Cold upon the dead volcano sleeps the gleam of dying day. - Tennyson .......................................................................... Xanudu gave birth to our Son Xerxes ,Prince of the New Golden Dawn Precious cosmic seed to regenerate fresh virgin life The errors of judgement,and mistakes of the past must be erased To retrieve the souls of Cain and Abel The Ancient Astral Brotherhood have decreed Experiment Earth was a failure Religion and Politics the Curse The new Martian Bloodline, will not be stained by original sin Armies, weapons and warfare exchanged for plough and share And all Men and Women will recognize the One Supreme Being Love, Peace and Honesty will be the Leading Lights That distinguish Mars from Earth We propagated and procreated the hybrid celestial race And built the communities of tolerance all along the frozen iced Canals Liberated from the dogma of who does what, is right Instilled with the loving discipline, that this world is ransomed to All We sojourned under Glorious Galactic Nights beneath the Canopy of Heaven Irrigation channels and Fertilization spores sowed the rebirth of air and land Cosmic plants and fauna took over from lava and magma And the Red Planet rejoiced, as Transfiguration took place All the genuine altruistic doctrines and ideals learned and preserved from birth And Death and Expulsion to Hatred, Anger and Strife No dissenting voice, would ever take hold in this Utopian World From the beginning the Absolute Belief, that All are Equal before The Eternal One With all the checks and balances set in place, to keep the Perfect Equilibrium There is always a price, for everything you do What we put out into our World has got to be honest and true And as we gaze into the Universe, and marvel at the countless galaxies Just remember this, someone, somewhere else, is gazing back at you Copyright by Peter Paton 2006

Reviewed by Dale Clark

Reviewed on January 30, 2006

It gives one pause for hope.
What else is there.

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on January 29, 2006

The last line is very true! :-)

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Makes me think how your theme and style has metamorphosed since your last sustained spell here a while back Peter. I really used to enjoy your "fabled" or allegorical tales that had such richness and depth, and this is like a "throw-forward" instead of a "throw-back". You have become more "geometric", somehow, I feel. More algebraic and less filigree. But all expressions have a very strong voice and a vibrant message. I like the tangential qualities to this and the very bold pictures that it projects for us. Bless you, Kate xx

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Peter, you did yourself and all of us proud with this one! A mighty achievement in uplifting us to poetic justice!Grand concepts make for a grand poem!

Eileen

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Experiment Earth was a failure
Religion and Politics the Curse

With every passing day lately, I sadly find myself believing this more and more.

Can I join your Sojourn to Mars, Peter - and can I bring along a few lovable little critters, too?? I promise we won't take up too much space.

I really enjoyed this epic poetic journey of yours, my friend.

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)

The chances of anything coming from mars are a million to one, Jeff Wayne said...

Love the take on this. Makes one stop and think!!

Reviewed by jude forese

i like how you telescope your reader into the possibilites of an inspired new world ands broaden that vision that life beyond our system, observing our world ... what they see is a world that still has a lot of evolving to do, both spiritually as well politically ...
all in all, i enjoyed this Mars Trio and delighted in its stimualting qualities, visual constructs and inspired message ...

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Absolutely amazing..and the last line says it all!!

Always watching!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by George Carroll

An ending or beginning of a wonderful ride in the Universe while stopping to populate Mars. The last sentence sums it up nicely as that someone is God.