She took you to places no one else had shown you
Feeding you tastes of exotic spices, baked
To perfection in dainty little tarts, she delighted
In teasing yours senses and laughing at your affectations
This waif of a girl in long skirts and lace bodice
Ribbons trailing from plaited hair, streaming around her face
She ran through meadows of your mind with a grace that now eludes you
While you grew fat on books and pretensions, she remained
Carefree and happy behind you, beneath your notice
Now that you had grown so pompous, though never quite forgetting
The joy of youth she gave you, those nights on a tattered blanket
Beneath a sky without judgement, she gave you
Her love and her innocence to please you, sate you, she gave
And you took without commitment, leaving her as you found her
Slightly mad and strangely angelic, laughing in your memory
As she baked her tarts and plaited her hair, alone she grew old but unfaded
Retaining her inner beauty, while you grew rich and bitter
With self contempt and nostalgia, for love once innocent, now lost
You can no longer find the places that she took you, only a hint of spice
Wafting in the air reminds you…and silent tears run easily
From eyes too late opened…of a love too late acknowledged
As they lower her casket into the ground, you cry, too late
Wonderful character portraiture here as usual, Sue. You are master at capturing the details of human nature and persona with so few words - like a sketch artist. The tale is poignant and all too real... yet, with the peeps as you depict them here, I wouldn't mind betting that the sweet soul who lost her life ultimately was somehow "quite OK about what she had sown into the other's life" - cos that was ultimately her nature to do that; on the other hand, what I get from Mastermind is that his whole life was sham and that he only ever suffered dissatisfaction and self-loathing at all levels. Could be way off here from what YOU intend with this portrayal, but just goes to show the depth of precision you bring to your subjects that I could even begin to draw this level of thought about them. ALL your people are totally 3-D - always! Great write as ever, LOL Kate xx
Are you sure you weren't one of my grandmother's neighbor kids Sis. Sue? I understand and dread the day when it come for my Grandmama Ruby. Blessin's and sweet memoirs to you,
cynth'ya lewis reed
a sad poem with vivid and images that bring the reader totally into the experience ...
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on September 22, 2005
Aw, whot a sad tale of love sour'd. You really did a good job with this poem, Sue, and these are not that easy to do, I know I refuse to show my amateurish skills by attempting this kind of piece. You continue to grow and spread your literarty wings. Good for you.
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cynth'ya lewis reed
"leaving her as you found her
Slightly mad and strangely angelic"
killer turn of phrase. This work has a great deal of magnetism. I was drawn in instantly and I was left wanting more...much like your pompous hero.
Peace,
B
Eileen
Felix
Well written....and very sad!!
Love Tinka