How does one dig oneself from an unexpected avalanche of experiences and emotions?
Avalanche
I don’t think you know How you snowed over me With your smile Your honey hair Your ears Your eyes Your nose Your teeth Your breasts Your tiny silky hairs Your scent Your complete you You wholly snowed over me I try not to think of you I miss too many heartbeats I will be snowed under even deeper I shall no longer breathe Sweet avalanche
The French is a little different. I don’t know why. Different mood I guess.
Avalanche
Je ne pense pas que tu saches Comment tu es mon avalanche Tu m’ensevelis dans ta neige Avec ton sourire Tes cheveux argentés Tes oreilles Tes yeux Ton nez Tes dents Tes seins Tes tous petits poils Ta senteur Ton toi essentiel Tu m’ensevelis dans ta neige Je ne peux plus te regarder Sans que mon cœur manque des battements Je serai enseveli encore plus profondément Tu me rendras fou Je ne pourrai plus respirer Douce avalanche
Interesting way of describing your feelings for someone and how it all unfolds in the end... Thank you for sharing. You certainly have a way with words that get to our heartstrings...
Overtaken by love and beauty...a beautiful set of poems. I like the French version better, too. Maybe because line 2 sounds more romantic in French. ~Sheila
What a great title again (best yet! i've read) I wish I could write and arrange words like this into something really meaningful but I'm too grammatical. Simple & brilliant!This is real relationship poetry without all the blabbering spillout of tortued souls who haven't mastered language (myself included)! Luckily I always have my piano and I paid my dues there believe me. Are you French canadian?
Tomorrow the "B" column.
Hey, Reg!
It's time to dig your way out and take a look around for a way to escape! Missing heartbeats and not being able to breathe call for a rescue effort before it's too late!
Okay, I'm sorry. I get carried away sometimes in my attempts to be funny.
This is one that should mesmerize the subject when you read it to her. To be the one who is called "Sweet Avalanche" is to be sweetly adored. Any woman's head would be turned by such absolute devotion in response to her charms.
Reg,
I enjoyed reading and liked how your progression of thought in itself suggested the uncontrolled tumble of an avalanche. I wonder if you could extend this into a second stanza? ....perhaps in a second verse making reference to 'your laughter, your sighs, your tears'....something alone that line. Just a passing thought as I read your lovely poem of how emotional beauty can catch us up as well as physical beauty.
...warm regards,
...jeanne
Reviewed by Shelly Davis (Reader)
Reviewed on June 19, 2007
How does one dig oneself from an unexpected avalanche of experiences and emotions?
The answer is simple, the quest to do so, very difficult at times. Perseverance is the key.
'Your complete you'....! 'Ton toi essentiel'....!
I love your description of the Avalanche of rapture!
Powerful visuals and analogy of desire's ability to lose oxygen!
Great work Regis!
Love, Suzie :-D
I love the French Reg! I took 2 years of
French way back in 86 - 88 in High school! LONG Time ago!
I remember some of it. We celebrated by going to
France and England that summer. It was nice!
Beautiful work. Amazing how when we let love in- you just never know if you are grabbing the tail of a tempest, of if it will be more like a fragrant summer breeze . . .
I guess the mystery is part of why we want it so badly. Even if it might just kill us.
Peace, Regis.
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on June 9, 2007
Oooo..I love this piece..oh to be loved with such ardour!
Digging deep into REgi's Heart NOW! I think I shall stay awhile....
This poem is truly Awesome my Sweet Friend, of the written pen!
this is gem i plan to treasure
Wow!
Sorry! She hurt you so badly too~
Sweet Acalanche - I like that!
Stay STrong!
A poem came from the hurt she brought your way and memories without much delay~
Warmly, WArrior Spirit Lady Sheeeoox
Stay POsitive!
Pier said that "there is something intriguing about outrunning an avalanche." But can we actually outrun the avalanche of emotions that we build up in a realtionship, marriage, or friendship? If we do, then we are greater than great, because we have done something no one else can. You have actually put the mood of trying not to think of her, in a light perspective that makes this poem truly beautiful. Nice imagery and great flow. Thank you for sharing Reg.
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your sister, Barbie
Regis,
I am frozen in place, with admiration for your gifts! This is just plain glorious, mon ami!
You are an exception to the rule, Reg....ONE of A Kind!
Just lovely, my Brother.
Love& Hugs always, Rhonda
PS> Jason is visiting for the summer ..he's no longer a boy, Reg..
but his autism causes many difficulties. Deeply Apreciate your prayers for, and encouragements to, him.
Shiver me timbers! I'll never look at ice the same way.(just kidding!) There is something intriguing about outrunning an avalanche. I enjoyed this snare of a write.
Both versions are quintessentially nerve-tingling, Regis. Being under such a spotlight might be totally melting of that avalanche, you know! :)) Then it will be breathing underwater... Think I'll just mosey off and breathe into a brown paper bag to recover from the hyperventilation... This is truly passionate and way up close... TY Kate xx
Powerful imagery. I guess instead of trying to dig yourself out, you could try to melt your snow lady's heart. Thankyou for this beautiful and frosty gem.
Excellent write. Sorry I really regret I never did master French but it's fun to try and read that version. Great Picture too. Au revoir, Monsieur...Joyce
Enjoyed this write my friend, your poem is filled with emotions, a bit of sadness tugs at the heart for the longing that is felt within the words. Enjoyed the both the English and the French...very touching!
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Reviewed by Malcolm Watts (Reader)
Reviewed on May 31, 2007
English and French - I'm impressed. Nice piece Regis. Malcolm
Wow this is a beautiful expressed poem!
Is overwhelming with energy and love
This page was hit by avalanche of passion and romance
A fine piece of true love poetry!!
Love and Peace to you always
your friend...Morning star
Quite romantic and full of energy and passion. I wish I was able to read the French version. You have really penned a beauty here, Regis. I'm waiting to see if the Avalanche returns soon...
Regis,
I love both versions and can understand what you have written. I MUST congratulate you on being the "first person" on this site (since I've been a member) whose works I've read and gotten the negative infinitive (not to think) grammatically correct.
Je ne sais pas pourquoi le Français est différent.
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Much Love,
Margaret
Now I am totally captivated. You are slowly killing me with your wonderful prose.
Nicole
Absolutely gorgeous/stunning photo and poem - superb!
Best to you,
Lance
Tomorrow the "B" column.
The hair - both
The whole discription
Made me think of Stevie Nicks
I'm starting to like the french more each time
DWB
Helen
It's time to dig your way out and take a look around for a way to escape! Missing heartbeats and not being able to breathe call for a rescue effort before it's too late!
Okay, I'm sorry. I get carried away sometimes in my attempts to be funny.
This is one that should mesmerize the subject when you read it to her. To be the one who is called "Sweet Avalanche" is to be sweetly adored. Any woman's head would be turned by such absolute devotion in response to her charms.
Ah, love!
Connie
I enjoyed reading and liked how your progression of thought in itself suggested the uncontrolled tumble of an avalanche. I wonder if you could extend this into a second stanza? ....perhaps in a second verse making reference to 'your laughter, your sighs, your tears'....something alone that line. Just a passing thought as I read your lovely poem of how emotional beauty can catch us up as well as physical beauty.
...warm regards,
...jeanne
The answer is simple, the quest to do so, very difficult at times. Perseverance is the key.
Gina
I love your description of the Avalanche of rapture!
Powerful visuals and analogy of desire's ability to lose oxygen!
Great work Regis!
Love, Suzie :-D
French way back in 86 - 88 in High school! LONG Time ago!
I remember some of it. We celebrated by going to
France and England that summer. It was nice!
Beautiful poetry! Keep it up!
Becca
ulrike
Sandie Angel :o)
I guess the mystery is part of why we want it so badly. Even if it might just kill us.
Peace, Regis.
Vesna.)
This poem is truly Awesome my Sweet Friend, of the written pen!
this is gem i plan to treasure
Wow!
Sorry! She hurt you so badly too~
Sweet Acalanche - I like that!
Stay STrong!
A poem came from the hurt she brought your way and memories without much delay~
Warmly, WArrior Spirit Lady Sheeeoox
Stay POsitive!
thanks for sharing
Steve
peace,
carolyn
Love,
Sage
Ahh ... the sweet heart and emotions - a wonder to experience and behold. Blessings to you dear north of the border brother ...
Richard
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your sister, Barbie
indeed!!:) [Excusez moi. Je suis un peu de froid . . .need to get out de la neige. . .] Je t'aime, Monsieur Reg, 'Pi'
I am frozen in place, with admiration for your gifts! This is just plain glorious, mon ami!
You are an exception to the rule, Reg....ONE of A Kind!
Just lovely, my Brother.
Love& Hugs always, Rhonda
PS> Jason is visiting for the summer ..he's no longer a boy, Reg..
but his autism causes many difficulties. Deeply Apreciate your prayers for, and encouragements to, him.
This is one avalanche I'm sure nobody would mind being buried under.
very nice
Walt
Myrna
Love,
Eileen
Edwin
Love,
Susan
Love TinkaSweets :)
Beautiful poem.
God Bless,
Lew
(((HUGS))) and much love, ton ami, Karen Lynn. :D
You've outbested yourself: completely snowed under by the weight of passion detailed here in beautiful verse! Well done!
But whatta way to go. :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Enjoyed reading
Peace be with you
William
Be safe,
Karen
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Is overwhelming with energy and love
This page was hit by avalanche of passion and romance
A fine piece of true love poetry!!
Love and Peace to you always
your friend...Morning star
~hugs~
Karen
Hugs, Laura
Larry
Lena :)
Love it.
Elizabeth
Fee
Always good things to you and yours,
Jim
I love both versions and can understand what you have written. I MUST congratulate you on being the "first person" on this site (since I've been a member) whose works I've read and gotten the negative infinitive (not to think) grammatically correct.
Je ne sais pas pourquoi le Français est différent.
George
TRASK
Your pen is always perfect Regis..
Your friend,
Ron
Thanks,
Dan