Renderings of the Worm (poem) by Patrick A Granfors on AuthorsDen

Renderings of the Worm
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This was inspired(?) by a poem that Annabel Sheila wrote, "Resting Place." As is customary, I must apologize for subject abuse.

*Bones and stones and boxes* *Peaceful nonetheless* *A gathering of the fallen* *Collectively confess* *I should have been an actor* *I should have been a cop* *I should have been a teacher* *I should have known when to stop* *I should have learned to love more* *I should have taken time* *Though I enjoy your company* *The view forgoes sublime* *Oh sure it’s pretty topside* *With gorgeous planted berms* *But down here in these quarters* *We wrestle with the worms* *Of course the worms are winning* *As worms are prone to do* *It’s how Nature returns the favor* *The ultimate joke’s on you* *Life’s not always gloom and doom* *Life’s not always fair* *But it’s better than the alternative* *That six feet of soil brings to bear* Copyright 2010 Patrick Granfors

Reviewed by Sylvia Corsini (Reader)

Reviewed on September 10, 2010

I will be cremated. Defeat the worms.

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on September 8, 2010

In the end, the worms have it.

Ron

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater

Reviewed on September 7, 2010

But is the alternative of jail better than "six feet of soil", OR is "six feet of soil" better than jail?

Love,
Sage

Reviewed by pat medlin

oh patrick thanks...we got the best of both your headsthis time...(of course i know you have multiples...not just 2) this is great

you had me on a wistful stroll thu a quaint little cemetary and then BOOM!...i stepped off the edge and fell into all these 'wormy' images .... great!....but next time i'll read the title...Hah

Reviewed by David Maclellan

You're a funny man Patrick, I laughed the first time and then thought about the wisdom of your words, double the value friend!
Best wishes
David

Reviewed by Christine Tsen

One of a kind, original gem!
(Perhaps I should have eaten breakfast before reading, though! Ha.)
Ever,
Christine

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan

very well done, inspiring and thought provoking

Reviewed by Annabel Sheila

Hahahaha! Love this twist and alternate point of view so to speak!! giggle...You never cease to crack me up, Patrick! Well done!

Hugs,
Anna

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart

A poem of deep thought presented in a very practical way. Well penned and effective!

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

TOTALLY BRILLIANT and far from subject abuse, it seems to me. This has a light-hearted feel but really casues me to reflect on how precious it is to STILL be perched precariously above instead of six feet under God's green earth and I think you have crafted the balance and attitude of this poem EXQUISITELY, Patrick. Pat yourself on the back - this sort of success is hard to pull of when it grapples with such delicacies, but you do so with great panache and aplomb. Much appreciated, thanks! :)) xx

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

I really like worms; they do wonders in my garden. But Alas, I've left my wife instructions to cremate my remains, and to periodically sprinkle a few of my ashes in our many cat litter boxes so my felines know I'm still around.

Reviewed by Paul Berube

Well told, Patrick. No apology necessary.

Reviewed by Cynth'ya Reed

Reviewed on September 6, 2010

Creative license needs no apology Patrick.
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