Inspired by the movie "Matchstick Men." My daughter told me to watch it. Now, I know why. Well, I'm not that bad. This is for fun and not meant to offend. I am a bit of a neat freak. This could also be symbolic and mean a lot more than I can say.
OCD – Not In My House
(haiku format)
Soft is the kitten Purring on the window sill In the warm sunshine
By the fireplace The dog has fallen asleep He dreams of outdoors
On the floor below A mouse softly scurries by Looking for bread crumbs
In a dark corner A cockroach quietly goes About his business
Just above the door A spider patiently waits For a hapless fly
In the clothes closet A moth is busy at work Munching on cotton
Barely visible The ants are getting frantic Someone dropped a grape
On the kitchen floor A silverfish flashes by Seeking the shadows
Up in the attic The bats hang from the rafters Waiting for nightfall
High on the rooftop The pigeons are discussing Where to go for lunch
I think I'll go nuts There's so much I can't control No one is listening
I’ve lived in that house But I no longer live there I have OCD (not that bad really)
Good poem making OCD STAND OUT , taking shoes off when entering house was how I was brought up, kitchen floor scrubbed after every meal, dusting everyday, so clean when I was punished and told to dust the bedroom, I just sat on bed as it was so dustfree, lol, truth be told, OCD a disease - and it's bad enough for me to know I no longer live having to cope with it.
Well, All ya can say to all that make themselves at home is Welcome to my home.
A fun and so inviting poem for the critters.
Loving, safe and warm.
Thank You
Tracey
I've known such souls, Regis, and perhaps at one time in my life dabbled a little on this edge, only to realize it signaled thoughts I did not want to think, feelings I did not want to feel. We humans are interesting and complex contraptions, aren't we?
I, one of the AD vampires, dropped by as I roamed the AD corridors these wee hours. Well, well, so your secret's out. LOL. I especially liked the following:
Up in the attic
The bats hang from the rafters
Waiting for nightfall
High on the rooftop
The pigeons are discussing
Where to go for lunch
Charming. I needed this laugh now, Regis. One of my good friends' husband is a neat freak, but what makes him Mr. Wonderful is that rather than drive everyone crazy, hoping tho force them to live to his standards, he cleans the house. Now that's what I'm talking about! Gotta find me one of those.
Reviewed by autumn blair-strange (Reader)
Reviewed on June 13, 2004
ha ha this is so great! it points to the futility of trying to be in control..and you did it so very well! now i must keep reading,so little time,so much to read......hugs,Autumn
I think I'll go nuts
There's so much I can't control
No one is listening
***
:) Bev
Reviewed by Kathleen Herrick (Reader)
Reviewed on May 14, 2004
I wish I had this problem, or aat least my family does. LOL Thanks for sharing your heart. :)
Reviewed by Abe Rossi (Reader)
Reviewed on May 12, 2004
Hey Regis, you don't cover the furniture in plastic do you....next time I wonder over here I'll remember to take my shoes off before stepping in...LOL...nice write...thanx for sharing...Peace Abel
I really and truly hate bugs and such...of all kinds...so kind of made me feel yucky...UNTIL...i kept reading on and recognized the much deeper message and use of metaphor in this piece. This is very well done...
This is brilliantly wrote. Obsessive-compulsive disorder, I think we all have to some degree. Be it the child who is hyper; the man who constantly wipes his car of any speck of dirt; some people have to count everything many times over. A friend of mines would come to visit and as we chatted she was steady wiping my counter tops and stove. I don't see a person's disorder, I see their heart. Thanks
for putting truth of a disorder flavored with humor. This is a fine write that should be published. Just my 2 cents...
You have crafted some great images. Thanks for the laugh!
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on May 8, 2004
Well you just clicked a button on me Regis...
My husband is compulsive.....obsessive compulsive...
and yes it is a disorder...I mean when you see a
guy kneeling on the grass cutting it with scissors
to get the edges all neat and straight...MY GAWD>>>>
LOL....I guess you know my house is clean..but it
drives me up a wall...I am a bit compulsive about
things being in order and tidy...but with him it is
serious...LOL....thanks for this offering...at least
I could laugh at it all....floria
OCD, not sure what it mean, but I assume it has something to do with keeping things relatively neat...man, you have got to be kidding, I live with a dog, that is 60 pounds of hair and 10 pounds of dog, and it is everywhere I look, I have to clean the vacuum cleaner after vacuuming up his hair, LOL! He brings everything he touches into the camper, as it attaches to his hair and like that...will have to rent Matchstick Men, I do recall a song by a group called the Bubble Puppy, way back in the psychedelic era called Pictures of Matchstick Men, oh I am sorry, got off the subject at hand, damn drugs...
Poem is really pretty, even talk of the little creatures that crawl behind our cabinets and such, if we don't know they are there, I personally am better off, LOL! Ants are so brazen, they crawl out on my counter top every now and then, I follow them to where they hide and spray the shit out of them with RAID...can't do much more, till they come out someplace else...sorry I had a cup of coffee and makes me rant long and prolifically...I enjoyed reading it, but it did make me wonder what Cynth'ya said, "reasons why" in the same silence...Peace thru the Word, Ed & Rufuz (w00f)
This thing you've written is so well put together, it should be recited by you on the Matchstick Men DVD! Everything has voice, the things that make us go "eek" cause one to read and ponder "reasons why" in silence.
Bravo on what I see as another AD winner!
cynth'ya lewis reed
Reviewed by Monette Bebow-Reinhard (Reader)
Reviewed on May 8, 2004
Well done! To start so sweetly with cats and dogs and then move on to spiders ants and cockroaches and bats and then end with birds, very well framed and paced and extremely visual. Thanks for sharing!
Monette
i have it to an extent...at work, everything must be in particular order, if it isn't, i go nuts LOL but my home is more...shall we say...relaxed? not particularly clean, but not a disaster area, either...cluttered would be a good word here LOL
love these haiku--enjoyed!
(((HUGS))) and merci, mon ami, amor, karla. :)
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on May 8, 2004
I confess: I don't know what OCD means BUT.. that doesn't preclude my loving your poem and I do so love it, Regis. I decided to ignore my ignorance here and simply let the bursts of thought come as they do when I read... I could feel my smile widen at the ants, learning of the dropped grape.. and of the pigeons, discussing lunch.. all in all, you did something that will stay with me.. you wrote entirely of things that SHOULD elicit a groan, critters everywhere in the house... but, in fact, your magic pen brought a feeling of affection and revelation.. for that, I marvel at your poetic gift. katy xox.
What a fun read...! Even when things are relatively "quiet" in our homes, there is SO MUCH going on....on so many levels. This one made me think (quietly of course!). Thanks Regis.
All what you said is true but truth nis sometimes more humorous than fiction itself. thank you Regis and thanks, too to ypur daughter who recommenbded you to watch that film which inspired you. Peace and love to you.
abdinoor
Is that me looking at you under that Wavycarpet.....lol!!
Thanks for this reminder to d some springcleaning...seriously..lol!!
Word speaks more than action!!
"(Between you and me and the deep blue sea and the seagulls right???)"
Love Tinka
Reviewed by na na (Reader)
Reviewed on May 7, 2004
Regis, a very pleasant look at many of the everyday things that go on around us. You show the value of being an observant bystander. Any topic you choose to write shows a touch of genius; and for this I respect all your work. Bill
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on May 7, 2004
Hee, hee, you'll get over it...
I can't stand dust in the house...
Some people could plant potatos on the
top of their tv's, or anything with a top.
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A fun and so inviting poem for the critters.
Loving, safe and warm.
Thank You
Tracey
I've known such souls, Regis, and perhaps at one time in my life dabbled a little on this edge, only to realize it signaled thoughts I did not want to think, feelings I did not want to feel. We humans are interesting and complex contraptions, aren't we?
Up in the attic
The bats hang from the rafters
Waiting for nightfall
High on the rooftop
The pigeons are discussing
Where to go for lunch
Charming. I needed this laugh now, Regis. One of my good friends' husband is a neat freak, but what makes him Mr. Wonderful is that rather than drive everyone crazy, hoping tho force them to live to his standards, he cleans the house. Now that's what I'm talking about! Gotta find me one of those.
***
I think I'll go nuts
There's so much I can't control
No one is listening
***
:) Bev
Ann
for putting truth of a disorder flavored with humor. This is a fine write that should be published. Just my 2 cents...
My husband is compulsive.....obsessive compulsive...
and yes it is a disorder...I mean when you see a
guy kneeling on the grass cutting it with scissors
to get the edges all neat and straight...MY GAWD>>>>
LOL....I guess you know my house is clean..but it
drives me up a wall...I am a bit compulsive about
things being in order and tidy...but with him it is
serious...LOL....thanks for this offering...at least
I could laugh at it all....floria
Tommy
Best wishes.
Thomas Lanechanger
just another incredible write from your glistening pen!
Thank you
Love, Sheila
Poem is really pretty, even talk of the little creatures that crawl behind our cabinets and such, if we don't know they are there, I personally am better off, LOL! Ants are so brazen, they crawl out on my counter top every now and then, I follow them to where they hide and spray the shit out of them with RAID...can't do much more, till they come out someplace else...sorry I had a cup of coffee and makes me rant long and prolifically...I enjoyed reading it, but it did make me wonder what Cynth'ya said, "reasons why" in the same silence...Peace thru the Word, Ed & Rufuz (w00f)
Bravo on what I see as another AD winner!
cynth'ya lewis reed
Monette
i have it to an extent...at work, everything must be in particular order, if it isn't, i go nuts LOL but my home is more...shall we say...relaxed? not particularly clean, but not a disaster area, either...cluttered would be a good word here LOL
love these haiku--enjoyed!
(((HUGS))) and merci, mon ami, amor, karla. :)
Good write, Regis!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn the PackRat. :D
Carmen :-)
Hope your OCD remains under control!!
good write
j+
abdinoor
Brilliantly written.....I enjoyed :-)
Andrea
gives me the creeps;-)But I love the ku;-)
This is excellent Regis....
TY
Peg
Thanks for this reminder to d some springcleaning...seriously..lol!!
Word speaks more than action!!
"(Between you and me and the deep blue sea and the seagulls right???)"
Love Tinka
I can't stand dust in the house...
Some people could plant potatos on the
top of their tv's, or anything with a top.