State of Being...Um' Challenged? (poem) by Patrick A Granfors on AuthorsDen

State of Being...Um' Challenged?
by Patrick A Granfors → (All Poetry by Patrick A Granfors)
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In response to Amber's challenge. Hey, you said my state at THIS moment.
To being or not to being Is that the question? Whether my cranial state affords the opportunity To relish that which is generously bestowed By the Master Who if Elects on any particular occasion At the sole discretion of the Master To forward my flimsy existence beyond the swirling Tidy bowl ceramic vessel containing my current broth To my next destination before the axle of my oxcart Impales the sunrise Thus assuring my soul Is not lost among the other floating particles Lovingly providing divine guidance to my inner voice that says YES! Relish! Generous portions of Relish! On my Dodger Dog With onions And mustard Ooooofa! Being is good! Very good! Copyright 2010 Patrick Granfors

Reviewed by Chessly Nesci

Reviewed on June 1, 2010

If I had a bunch of relish and onions my tummy would be pretty messed up too! They are so very good going down and nothing compares to a Dodger Dog! I love your humor and choice of words in your writings! ~Chessly

Reviewed by Phyllis Jean Green

Reviewed on May 28, 2010

Maybe not always easy on the stomach.;)

Fun write, Patrick. You are so right. 's'all in the r e l i s h !!

Me, I eat Smartdogs. Ever try one? They're gooooood.

After all, it's what we add that makes things delicious.

L i f e !!

Thanks for the cheerer-upper. Note to self: keep an eye out for new treats from Patrick Granfor!

xOx 'Pea' xOx

Reviewed by Eileen Granfors

I leave town and the axel comes off the ox cart? Good golly, Mister.

Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader)

Reviewed on May 26, 2010

This is awesome Patrick! I had also thought about putting a humorous spin on it; but left it in your very capable hands indeed. Thanks for representing!

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Delightful poem, Patrick; well done! Enjoyed, but sorry to hear you'r sick; you're in my prayers; feel better soon!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :)

Reviewed by Amber Moonstone

Well, this was great poetry! I am sorry to hear that you are under the weather..However, you did take me literally! I liked your response it was creative and honest..
Hope you feel better,
Peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"

Reviewed by Liana Margiva

VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva

Reviewed by Georg Mateos

Patrick, this one is not a challenge response, this one is a literary karate chop! Ooooofa! You being good! Very good!

Georg

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater

Reviewed on May 25, 2010

David Carradine opening (RIP David)...Martial Arts of meditation during regurgitative State of Being in an acid reflux stupor, Patrick! Zen Zantac over the counter poetry...I see many colors swirling Grasshopper!

Love,
Sage

Reviewed by Ed Matlack

Better to have a Philly Cheesesteak than a "dodger dog"...and the state your in sounds just like where you always seem to be...e

Reviewed by Mark Lichterman

Uh, huh? Let's see, your tidy bowl contains your, uh, think you ought to take a couple'a tablespoons of the pink stuff for that? I'm lost among the floating particls but I'm old and don't think so well.
Your friend, Mark