The sun yawned, stirred himself awake and looked down at the lazy slug still in bed. This would not do. No, not at all -- if it couldn't sleep, neither would she. He poked his fingers into her eyes and said, "Wake up." Pulled the covers over her head: leave me alooone. He was determined she was not going to waste the day: you know, seize the morn and all that ... so he shone and shone and shone until the blankets got too heated to stay under: wow, hot. No choice but to get up - what it wanted all along, the sun, a friend and lover.
I love this! Great visuals. I got confused in all the pronouns though, maybe keep this one third-person?-- try calling "I" she and "it" he... what would happen? --Charlie (You know I only pick on the ones I really, really like...)
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Becca~
I like this composition... "The Power Of Persuasion (Revised)" glows.
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Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Michelle~
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Walt
:) Nice write Karla,,,
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Gooooodmorning to you too!!
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nice one Karla...
John
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(((HUGS))) and much love, your twink, Karen Lynn. :D
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Joyce B.