the storm is hungry, it must eat to live, it gorges on heat and humidity. the storm shovels it in with fork'ed hands, ever increasing in turgidity.
the storm inhales and chokes on chunks of ice, and its visage turns a ghastly blue-black. the storm sees lightning dance before its eyes, it vomits in resounding thundercracks.
the storm works up a sweat and it rains down, its appetite, one law it won't rescind. the storm's stomach growls, it's hungry again, it sucks up clods of earth in a whirlwind.
the storm finally slakes its hunger binge, its appetite, for now, under control. the storm lies down, ready to take a nap, a diet is not on its protocol.
Fantastic, Karla! It's probably not meant as a children's write, but I'm sure the sophisticated little darlings of our age would just about gobble this one up as much as us adults! And good on you, too, for showing that storm who's boss! Your triumphant pen, that's who! Really strong, visual writing this.... thank you. Kate xx
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on April 26, 2004
Love this description of a storm and sooooo original!
This is really great, hon, I love storms & you hate them, but I can understand your hate through your writes about them, this is so vivid, I can feel the storm. To compare it to something as minor as overeating is pure genius...you get better with each passing write...Peace thru the Write, Ed & Rufuz
the storm finally slakes its hunger binge,
its appetite, for now, under control.
the storm lies down, ready to take a nap,
a diet is not on its protocol.
karla,c
This is a fine example of your developing voice as a poet. I know how much you " love on " thunderstorms which makes this work all that more amazing. Nicely done, keep it up!
Karla I agree with Katy! An exceptional write!
You are on a roll! You may hate storms, but
they love your pen!;-)
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on April 25, 2004
Jaysus, Karla.. you could knock me over with a feather just now.. this is one bloody amazing poem! If I were to quote you the parts that dropped my jaw, I'd be writing the entire piece here.. sincerely true! I just couldn't stop reading... and won't need to, since it is about to journey to my library, where I can savor it again and again. THIS is damned great writing! katy xox.
Oh, my! What wonderful words you have used in this poem; terrific imagery! You clearly are developing into a gifted writer; and you deserve to be published or become famous! May your dreams of becoming published become a reality! I believe in you, and I think you would make one hell of a bestselling author and poet!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin (and biggest fan!), Karen Lynn. :D
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Never quite thought of a storm in those terms; but now I will. Well done!
Love Tinka
cause it is really true great write lady
hope it's a long sleep
Karla
imagine what happens in drizzle rains SMILES....
Well done..
the storm finally slakes its hunger binge,
its appetite, for now, under control.
the storm lies down, ready to take a nap,
a diet is not on its protocol.
I hate diets as much much as you hate storms, but WOW do you know how to write about them!! Well done!!
~Rose~
This is a fine example of your developing voice as a poet. I know how much you " love on " thunderstorms which makes this work all that more amazing. Nicely done, keep it up!
love,
john+
You are on a roll! You may hate storms, but
they love your pen!;-)
This is a great write, keep it up...
God Bless
Michelle~
quite thought of a storm in that way..
great description..floria
Well done!
Love, Sheila
Oh, my! What wonderful words you have used in this poem; terrific imagery! You clearly are developing into a gifted writer; and you deserve to be published or become famous! May your dreams of becoming published become a reality! I believe in you, and I think you would make one hell of a bestselling author and poet!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin (and biggest fan!), Karen Lynn. :D
Good write Karla! Lisa
Your writings keeps getting better and better. I like the choice of words in this one.
~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~