should I die?
it's 11 a.m.
and already
I've made friends
with this
vodka
just like
daddy
just like
daddy, baby
one, two,
four
should I live?
there's a gun
right here
beside this
gahblessed laptop
with the afternoon
sun
shining
....shining
on the barrell
in a streak of light
whose cheer
mocks me
fucking kicks
me
should I die?
oh I think so
yes
lick my lips
in utter
desire
of the sleek
curve
of that handle
oh god
yes
I should.
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Reviewed by (Reader)
Reviewed on February 1, 2002
A direct Anwser to the title. NO. Hmm, well i guess we all have our ups and downs, sure you might have written this on a down, but I hope you keep on the ups. a great poem, I like your style, keep writing, peace and love
Looks like we share the same dad and the same lust for life. *ahem*
On a serious note, you've got all the time in the world to be dead and not long to live, so stick around. Not for that reason but because if ya do it I'll call ya back on a Ouija board and ask you a bunch of dumb questions about the universe like, What color socks does God wear? or something. Yeah so better to stick around...for now.
The answer is no, not physically or spiritually. You will always live my dear, body or not, you chose where to send yourself, so stick around for a while, it is a short spell in the long run anyway!
Much love,
Caryn
Reviewed by Lisa Cannons (Reader)
Reviewed on January 26, 2002
Yep, been there. Looks damn good don't it!
Not worth the ass kicking you'd get off Janet though ::winks::
Lisa
Death Is Inevitable___ If You Drink Or Blow
Your Brains Out Nobody Will Care Only If You're a Celebrity___
But, If You Follow Your Path Gracefully, Die
With Dignity, You Will Be Missed By Someone who Cared,i.e. You (All) Still Will Answer To a Higher Being(God) in the End...
Yes, we all think this at some time in our life, it is so real, so doable at the time - good thing time does what it is best at - and passes by........ love your work, Carol x
Bam! Impact and eloquence.
But I will join the chorus is saying, you would be missed, mourned and lamented!
(I, for one, would enter an ageless funk over the loss of so pure a talent and lovely of a woman)
Well sweets, if it should happen to us, I'll meet you on the other side. I certainly hope not, not yet. 'Sides if you left me I'd have to kick your ass. Much Love, Janet xoxoxoxox
Reviewed by C. Gourlay (Reader)
Reviewed on January 25, 2002
April, I don't know what to say, I have been there, can't say I won't go back, but I'm still here ~ glad you are too.
Reviewed by Mari Laureano (Reader)
Reviewed on January 24, 2002
You are a tempest, April (one that many would watch from a safer vantage). Your anger is palpable and rages throughout your writing. It is wild and vivid and strong. It drives you (and your readers) to the breaking point.
Well, April, I certainly wouldn't want you to die. I hope it is just a poem that you play on the words. I know teenage years could be crappy sometimes, but hey, we've all been there, it's no big deal......
and tomorrow, the sun will shine upon you again. Smile!
Sandie Angel :o)
Reviewed by Gregory Sonn (Reader)
Reviewed on January 24, 2002
I think you should take a walk in the sun and ask yourself again!I agree with Tim not to, your unique perspective would be missed.
Gregg
A poignant story about letting go of a narcissist in your life. Have you ever been attacked FULL force by a narcissist? It's the closest thing to being stabbed over and over in the back.
Suspenseful and close to home, Rain of Deception 2 will leave you in Tears. Much like Part 1, this will shocking sequel will keep you on the edge of your fingertips.
On a serious note, you've got all the time in the world to be dead and not long to live, so stick around. Not for that reason but because if ya do it I'll call ya back on a Ouija board and ask you a bunch of dumb questions about the universe like, What color socks does God wear? or something. Yeah so better to stick around...for now.
Much love,
Caryn
Not worth the ass kicking you'd get off Janet though ::winks::
Lisa
Death Is Inevitable___ If You Drink Or Blow
Your Brains Out Nobody Will Care Only If You're a Celebrity___
But, If You Follow Your Path Gracefully, Die
With Dignity, You Will Be Missed By Someone who Cared,i.e. You (All) Still Will Answer To a Higher Being(God) in the End...
You Can Eat Dirt Or You Can Lick(Overcome) It...
TRASK
But I will join the chorus is saying, you would be missed, mourned and lamented!
(I, for one, would enter an ageless funk over the loss of so pure a talent and lovely of a woman)
Love and peace to you always,
**Mari**
and tomorrow, the sun will shine upon you again. Smile!
Sandie Angel :o)
Gregg